My heart cries out as I remember you whom I loved for so long
My mouth becons once again to sing out to you our song
Once a love had blossemed between us two
What felt like Eternal love, blind and true
But now , all I can see is that you are gone
I have been left here, alone singing our life song
In my heart now is where you live still
Your name I carry , your memories in my heart still
For I will remember you now , every day of evey month in every year
Untill my eyes see their final sight and my heart cries it's last tear
Author notes
"we live on by what we impress in others , even after we pass away" - poet of the shadows © 2006
A contest entry
- Bring the Muse... by evlclown.
850 points, ended January 23, 2007, 17 entries
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beautiful way of remembering love past...a good write
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Awwwwww, thats sad..... You are very good with words, and I love your poetry ^.^
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As I said before, she was lucky to have you
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beautiful
a very heartfelt piece, full of painful but beautifully wirded emotions. i agree in every way with you view of needing to carry on peoples names, if this is a loss you have suffered, then i give you my greatest sympathies
congratulations on penning a brilliant, heartfelt piece
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great write
your poems move me so i love your style of writing it is like artwork with words keep it up...im in love with your poetry
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Wow...your poems are so inspiring!! SO full of emotions!! I love em!!! I like your quote at the end too!! Thats a good ending note....not quite sure what its about but i love emotion that pours out of it!
MINDIE
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Second Thoughts...
Sorry, I had second thoughts about this poem, lol.
Hmm...I guess this is one fo you old poem, that you have written in the pass, about your ex-girlfriend, as you have done with many other poems...
I gotta go now, Take Care! -
Are you sad about your ex leaving you? With all of your recent poems, that's kind of what I'm getting... I wish you good luck. But great poem!
Cassie
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Shines the Emotional Muse
Hi. I quite agree with Tiff M, as it does have a some rhythm in the scheme. It sounded as though you are talking about when you lost your brother, as I know he has passen long ago, and that for the fact that you still miss your twin, now and then.
Keep up with the good work, as there are hope that still shines upon you!!
xxxx
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Not Bad
You have a typo...you is supposed to be your i assume when you say "You name I carry on." The rhythm and rhyme scheme are both good. Nice work.
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