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One Night





Hands fervently glide across aching skin
as digits serenade through luscious shivers
of whipped cream and cocoa covered breasts

Palms sweaty, heavily laden with sticky
soothing the ambiance of a soul misunderstood
every caress, intense with the onset of orgasmic pleasure

Ravines of taunting tenderness corrupting curves
covering every crevice , colliding with the crest of moon
whisking souls to the heavens, to the outer limits of spiritual cadence

Through tender tastes of treasure
nectar flows as naked eye reveals elation

sated sighs shimmering through starry skies

Raspberry licks racing against taut bodies
sensations traipsing for solid screams
powerfully heard amongst plunged stamina

Moaning names under worn out breath
wearily heaving atop the other
relishing beads of profound precipitation

 

Intent revelations swarm through satisfied beings

hunting for warmth within arms of lovers

rested spirits sailing into content seas

 

Lust unknown to sensual seduction
only lonely people tracing tresses of gold
sleepily sedated with sexual stimulant

Author notes

Somewhat Soft erotica I suppose. You tell me!

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  • Restless Brook
    June 2, 2007
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    This is really well written. I love your imagery, especially "corrupting curves." Very well done.


  • Errant Panther gold member
    March 26, 2007

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    Excellent

    so beautiful and sensual, has me craving for just the slightest taste of such pleasures. awesome writing I really do feel this genre is your forte.


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 30, 2007

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    Wonderfully sensual and so beautifully written! Wow! Your wording and your presentation all combine to make a truly awesome write! Thank you for sharing and for being a part of the contest!


  • pattyann4500
    January 10, 2007
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    Very sensual and wonderfully written, my dear. Elegant and sexy! Hugs, Patricia


  • Nicole Cudworth
    January 10, 2007
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    BTW... the background is perfect for this poem. Suits it quite nicely.


  • Nicole Cudworth
    January 10, 2007
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    Soft, sensuous and tender. It felt as though one were cresting a high wave and gently sliding over the top into a heavenly bliss. Loved the images that came to mind as I read your brilliant piece of work.

    Love and luck in all you endeavor.


  • Jeremy0826 silver member
    January 9, 2007

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    Very beautiful work here Krystal. I love the passion and imagery here. Whipped cream and cocoa covered breasts! MMM! lol Great work and thanks for sharing it here!


    Jeremy0826


  • Painful Expressions
    January 9, 2007

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    Beautifully Written

    What a beautiful write you have here i love the passion and the rythem of this piece it flows so nicely. Great job and keep up the magnificent work honey.....Michael

  • FindingFate
    January 9, 2007

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    I've never noticed you use alliteration before...well done sister dear. This is soft in my opinion and flows like honey...yummy...Trina


    • Angel With No Halo
      January 9, 2007
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      LOL... yeah I use it a lot in my newer work..sometimes it is ver very suttle.. like I use it once or twice and that is it.. other times.. I go all out.. lol.. This one has the most I think that I have done..Sometimes it just flows right out.. lol.. Glad you liked it hon!!


  • Da-Lyricologist
    January 9, 2007

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    hey i am not to big on eroticas but i am glad that i read this one i just love these lines

    "Raspberry licks racing against taut bodies
    sensations traipsing for solid screams
    powerfully heard amongst plunged stamina"

    i also like the way you used food to make the whole experience Tastier...

    1 luv


  • Heavenly Angel silver member
    January 9, 2007

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    Oh how wonderfully and beautifully erotic and ultra sensual!
    Your wording and presentation are just awesome! Thank you for sharing this! It's awesome!


  • StormGoddess Greeters member
    January 9, 2007

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    I feel like I just had a dessert of all favors. Yum. Soft and sensual, passionate and well worded. The alliterations are great. This is surely a stiky and sweet piece of writing.

    Thank you for entering and good luck
    Storm

  • girlofthesun
    January 9, 2007

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    intelligently beautiful

    Wow!Girlfriend, you really are gifted and talented. It was better than soft erotica.You have a style all your own...I was more impressed with your unique way of writing.You group words together in a way that I would never think of doing.So original!It was like the words made love to my eyes and ears!


    • Angel With No Halo
      January 9, 2007
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      Thank you so very much for the wonderful comment and applause.. I am so glad you enjoyed this. As for it being original.. I dunno about that.. I ahve seen many like this one. Tis is where I learnt it. I don't know if you know of "alliteration" but that is what I used here in this write. That is basically what taking all those words that start with the same letter and putting them together.. like sinful seduction, simple serenade, tender tickles.... things like that.. it is pretty easy once you get the hang of it.. You should try it sometime.

      ~Krys~

  • pruedence
    January 9, 2007

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    Sexy! I got lost in the lust of the words...great write...flowed well with words moving fast as I read..thanks for sharing


  • slipperssun gold member
    January 9, 2007

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    wow they are words that could make a person hungerly hunt for food in the fridge to play with... very interesting they way you write...


    • Angel With No Halo
      January 9, 2007
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      Thanks sweety.. glad you liked this.. I have been trying to get a real good one.. and this for some reason just flowed right out on the paper.. lol..


  • grannyeri gold member
    January 8, 2007

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    amazing alliteration in these lines - flowed so well and so vivid in its images that it was as if we were there too, part of this sensual evening. Think you took the theme of the contest with the alliteration in it and used it in every line in the poem. Wonderful words...


    • Angel With No Halo
      January 9, 2007
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      Thank you!!

      Thank you so much for the great comment.. Actually I did not even notice the alliteration in the contest title.. lol..that is just the way I try to write most times. Some days it just flows right out of me..like with this one. lol.. Thanks again.. you are a gem!

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