I held his hand and turned to look at forever.
There I sat on the cliff viewing the people.
Those stupid people.
They forgot what freedom of summer was about.
The past brings back memories of riding bikes to no destination and staring at the sun as I tilted my head back in our “secret pool.”
Kissing the crackers and the snickers as we had our daily picnic of what was leftover in our house.
Spending long days building something out of nothing from sand on the beach.
Rolling in the grass thinking what high school would bring us.
And I remembered saying to him, “It’ll bring us nothing cause I have everything here.”
In Summerland where days were long and nights were longer.
But it ended.
No more waiting for him to get outside to play.
No more long walks with the dog.
No more seeing his face for twelve hours a day.
No more happiness.
But there I was, the evening before school
Holding his hand and he holding mine.
How I shared that moment of intensity.
I turned and grabbed his eyes
He would be dying tomorrow too.
Dying with me.
For we built our own graves on that cliff.
Knowing this would end,
knowing that tomorrow held me no promises of seeing him again
I scooted closer to him
shut my eyes
and
Kissed Him first.
A contest entry
- January New Members Contest by AP Greeters.
600 points, ended February 15, 2007, 120 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Comment me!!! PLEASE!!!
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Thanks for entering
This is an interesting poem on your first kiss. A whole different picture, not gooey and filled with amazing butterflies and sunshine but rather one filled with reality for many teenagers.
Some places could do with a bit of trimming but in all a good poem.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance
Rosemary -
A warm welcome to All Poetry!
I really liked the way you relayed the moment upto the kiss - good work
Thank you for entering the contest
I wish you luck and welcome you to All Poetry!
abscessed
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Thank you for your entry and welcome to Allpoetry!
This is such a melancholy piece. To live in the days where nothing and everything is the same all rolled into one... I remember when I was younger and the way I felt leaving all I knew to go to high school
This poem brought back memories and made my heart smile. Thank you for that
Wishing you all the luck in the contest and I hope you are welcome here
Faerie
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I really liked this, especially your ending, its fantastic and made me grin immmediately, in fact I am still grinning.
The image you added is lovely too, daisies and lillies are my favorite flowers, so I love the pic.
I wish you the best in the New Members Contest, and also a very warm welcome to AllPoetry! If you ever have a poem that you would like a comment on, please feel free to send me the link, and I will get to it as soon as I can!
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Thanks for the entry and welcome to the site!
What a beautiful yet sad love poem. Wow, I really like this one you’ve done a great job on it. I might suggest breaking the lines up a little more though, it would read a little smoother. Thank you very much for taking the time to write for and enter our contest. Best wishes and welcome to Allpoetry
Dove
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Welcome to AllPoetry
A vivid and intensely emotional write. It is done in a way that the reader is almost a participant rather than a spectator. I love the way you ended it. I think you have written a poem that most of us can recall similar circumstance to.
I really enjoyed the read. Best of luck in the contest and again, welcome to the site
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Welcome to Allpoetry!
I enjoyed this immensely! I felt compelled to click on your work here because the title alone just simply "spoke" to me. I'm certainly glad I followed my instinct as you have inspired me with thoughts and ideas for future writings of my own. Thanks for the nudge! My muse needed that. While I am here, let me also say, "welcome to Allpoetry"! I hope you find us a helpful and friendly place for posting all of your future works. Let me also encourage you to take some time to wander the site and check out all that we have to offer here. And remember, if you have any questions please feel free to contact any greeter here. Good luck in your contest!
♥ Touchof1der
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Hey nice one!
Very first poem of your is so brilliant. I like the idea that is placed behind. Good write. Nice read.
All the best.
Wishes and love
Kiddy
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Thanks for entering
Oh the days when we were carefree and happy. Those long summer days. They are long gone.
Good luck in the contest and welcome to allpoetry.
God Bless
Tammy
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