On the prowl, eyes of a night
Owl, you foul things
That wish to sneak about
Creak about with me in my black smack
Crack of an oaken tree, shrieking
Reeking of rotten day
The fray never kept me, leapt
At me only thrice this May
But I keep to my practice, my arts, my sprawl
Witches crawl from their ditches
The bitches, you howl
Scowl at me in your bestiality
"Have a drink or three!"
Yet I tend to my potions, the lotions
Of my grandmothers, whores and scores
Of scandalous vile, in my bile
You won't find another Christ brat, never
And, in knowing, I find it clever
To blend, to sever, like one of you
Bright and might, shallow and fallow
I wait for your hour of weak
And then I'll peek...
On the prowl, eyes of a night
Owl, you foul things
That wish to sneak about
Creak about with me in my black smack
Crack of an oaken tree.
Author notes
Originally released on DeviantArt on March 7th, 2006.
Original: http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/30040673/
No, this isn't really me, but it was fun to write and imagine.
Option 18 for Stef's contest.
Option 12/13 for Empathic (I'm not sure which one it really fits under, but it's an alternate dark world to me)In a list
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Comments
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hmmm...it was ok but the flow was rough and forced. The imagry was ok as well. great write and good luck!
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This was very fun to read. It has a rawness to it.
I really liked:
"Crack of an oaken tree, shrieking
Reeking of rotten day."
Thank you for entering,
Best of luck!
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Superb! Don't think I've ever read anything in this form before; impressive and intruiging. Thanks for this fantastic entry in my contest; good luck!
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Well this is definitely unique && interesting;; the only thing is I specifically asked for no rhyming poetry. I won't DQ you but I would ask next time to please just read the rules. Thank you for entering && good luck♥
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Beautiful
Wow....I really enjoyed this piece, because it contains intense creativity in a dark-fashion that is shameless in a strikingly entrancing manner....in other words I thought it was hot shit....lol! Keep your creativity going!!!
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Indeed a dark and deranged land in which I would want no dwelling on, I am afraid... Beautifully written though, and well thought out. Love the way it is presented also on DeviantArt, I have an account on there also.
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Very nicely written. It sent shivers down my spine. I have a poem where I am like an evil witch and it is all like one long spell. You flowed at first then, your rhyme was in-between the lines.
Anyways, I liked the poem, and I wish you luck in the contest. So, keep on writing,
Nooni
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It is filled with some amazing imagery and the poem has a fluid flow and rhythm that enhances the reading experience.
Definitely a write from the darker side.
Let the ink flow and your fingers dance.
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Wow, cool and detailed. I like the way it made me feel evil mwahahahaha. Very nice. Best of wishes~
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this was a great write for a fictional write..it was incredible..your words took me alone for the ride while reading the poem..it was amazing and incredibly wel writen..this was one of the best poems that ive read today! you are a very talented author and i hope you never stop writting!
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I asked for no rhyme the very first words of the contest. I am sorry. You may try again.
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My work is full of alliteration - there is no formal rhyme structure. Good luck with your contest.
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whoa. this is crazy. it's really good. it has awesome flow,and there's so much that's going on in it. i had so much fun reading it. for some reason,it almost came off as a riddle to me. maybe that was the intention? lmaao. i loved it,becuase it was dark and beautiful. almost as if that alone was the magical part. but this was unique,and therefore was magical in it's own way. so thank you for entering. and good luck.
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Thank you for entering my contest!
another deviant art convert i see!
thank you for sending this in it was a really thrilling read and i honestly enjoyed it. i loved the black smack crack of an oaken tree line.
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