Darkness fulfill each
countress emotional stricts
Haunting is nothing
Author notes
I was actually trying to write my first haiku, but a senryu came out instead -.- still good enough for me nyways trying to learn ^-^
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A contest entry
- Here in the darkness I know myself... by fallout49.
450 points, ended January 22, 2007, 13 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I liked this actually. Dark poems are my favourites and I'm just going all haikus and senryus today and I have to say that I'm amazed. The last line packed it all together and punched me in the face with an icy hand. Chilling.
All the best and keep writing
Never ♥
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Well I've never personally heard of a senryu, but whatever floats your boat. Fairly dark. I'm still in a little confusion over the second line, but it's all good. Good luck in the contest.
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"countress emotional stricts" meaning too many locked up emotions with no key to let them out, or something like that lol. As going insane from the intensivity of them
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Interesting
Not bad for your first try.
Question what does countress mean?
Well done... haiku get easier with practice! keep up the good work dear wifey!
xXx
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muuahhh
I meant by it as not countable =] instead of countless I wrote countress
gettin off the usuality of things abit hehe.
Ty sweetie pie wuv you!! "huggles"
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LOV THE PIC.. OEM NEED TO BE LONGER BUT GOOD STAR
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longer? :S.. o.o
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