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Empty Reflections

 

 

 

Though I am proud of all that I am,
There is an emptiness that taints me.
Upon gazing at my reflection, all I do see,
Is a face so expressionless, so bland.

Who is this girl that claims to be me,
Am I not who I think I am?
Can I find myself before my ends,
I'm afraid I'll never know.

Though I try I cannot show them,
The pain I hide behind false smiles.
The more I pretend, the more it hurts,
They will never know me.

There are secrets I embrace,
That I cannot tell,
Even though they hurt me,
I must keep them inside.

But how can I overcome,
A darkness that cannot be shared.
If only the answers resided,
In this reflection of mine.

When will my reflection show,
The true hidden me,
This feeling of emptiness, these tears I cry,

They dry before given a chance to fall.

 

Happiness lies in these dreams of mine,
Fulfilling them will bring me great pleasure,
If only it could heal this emptiness,
That will always be apart of me.

Behind this mask,
A girl of great promise sleeps,
If only I could wake her,
Then will I prove to this reflection of mine,
I am the girl I know.

~By Raven Tears aka Deaths Maiden~ (Copyright©2007)

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  • XxWillow LeafxX
    November 16

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    Very emotional & excellently put together! I like how you ask yourself a lot... thanks for entering && good luck!!
    <3 Nicole

  • Cena-of-Destiny
    September 18, 2008
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    Wow, the reference to not knowing yourself, excellent. Nicely done! Good luck in my contest!


  • echo-ink
    July 13, 2008

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    This was Amazing, so much emotion in this,

    A secret that causes pain kept hidden will not allow you to heal, such a sad poem, this was wonderful. good luck in the contest.


  • MrsJones
    March 20, 2008

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    Powerful piece of expression, and I think something many young girls can easily relate to. Thank you for sharing and entering my contest!


  • Flightless Raven
    June 15, 2007

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    Absolutely entrhalling!

    the frank, and straightforward format that this piece is encomposed by, is more than amazing, it has a flow to it that is subtle yet driven... i can taste the sorrow... nevcer stop writing, please.


  • grrlshadow
    February 23, 2007
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    again, i admire your courage in showing yourself so openly. this was a wonderful read, and to me sounded optimistic. i hope you DO wake that slumbering girl inside you! she deserves a chance to walk in the sun!


  • gullionmar
    February 3, 2007

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    well written

    very well written,sometimes life is hard to share especially when we've been hurt don't give up hope your very pretty and full of life treasure it

  • a vampirs lament
    January 30, 2007

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    This is very good, as with all your others. Even though Im a guy I feel like others dont want me to see them (hence I just see them as empty reflections)of something longing for.


  • WinE-reDpuddles
    January 29, 2007

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    oh wow. this is wonderful. its so beautifully sad. yet there is strength in too. i can see u will urself to be strong. ...sometimes pain releases wen u let out secrets that hurt u.... my heart goes out to u.your words seem so familiar to my feelings... but the secret of life is to know urself. thats the only truth. hope everything gets better soon. i can tell u write from ur heart. wonderful piece.


  • Game Master
    January 28, 2007
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    You should be proud of what you are, you're poem has inspired me, but I can't explain it. I guess I shouldn'et think less of a silver member, and all the contest rewards you gotten are really showing your colors. This poem is amazing and you should try and publish your work.


  • Wandika gold member
    January 11, 2007

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    Not to share yourself with others is the loneliness of the worse kind. The poem reflects that well. Good luck in the contest.

    Jim

  • fallen-leaf
    January 9, 2007
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    Wow.

    Oh wow, I honestly loved this poem. Its so deep and full of strong meaning. Its lovely, really. Your flow of your write was wonderful as well. Well keep it up, I will definitely want to read more of your poems! Thanks for sharing such an awesome piece! Oh, good luck in the contest!


    • Raven Tears gold member
      January 10, 2007
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      Thankyou so much I'm so happy you liked it it makes me feel special lol.
      Thankyou.

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