Whispers of love on bloody wings
Echoing madly in your visage
May this night pass and I will sleep
Dreaming of you in the darkness
Until sun burns my skin and I wake
Halted anew by another torture
Healed by you, then inflicted further
In the name- love- cherished so well
Um...? Same, same, comments appreciated.
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powerful
You express the hurt often experience when we are in love. I like the method you have used to bring the reader into the pain of the experience.
Ethereal Melody
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Thank you! ^__^ Heh, you always leave nice comments. Thanks for the applause, the comment, etc, etc!
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Very intersting, very nice. I like the way you compare pain to love. You really can't have love without pain. Great write, keep it up.
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Thank you, I appreciate the praise, and the comment, very much so. Again, I don't think that I meant to compare the two so blatantly, but I guess my subconcious mind had other ideas!
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this is beautiful, i like how love is compared to so much pain as it really is in reality very painful. keep the ink flowin --callah lynniz
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Thanks, very much! I don't even know what I was thinking when I wrote it (big suprise, eh?), but I'm glad that other people think it came out well, too. ^__^ Thanks again!
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