I miss the smell of vanilla
I miss the sound of your breath
I miss the feel of you against me
As we drifted off to sleep
I miss the way you would look at me
Like I was everything in the world
And I miss hearing your heart beat
In the sweet silence
I still can’t look at another woman
Without thinking of you
You’re always so near me
Yet I cannot touch you
You are only a dream
I want my tears to wash away
I want you in my arms
I want to be able to sleep again
I want heaven in my arms
The devil is lonely
He is stuck in Hell
He cries for his angel
And hopes she is well
I will still protect you
I will still give my life
Even if you are no longer mine
I will love you for all time.
Je t’aime toujours, mon ange.
Author notes
1-d
This is actualy about two people. The devil represents me, because Grace said I was like a fallen angel, not fully evil, but not good enough to be an angel. Then, the angel represents my grace, my ex.
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A contest entry
- Option Upon Options Contest by SensualWhispers.
525 points, ended January 19, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Tears of Goodbye by Abstract Image.
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Bronze trophy winner
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Silver trophy winner
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this was beautiful! thank you so much for entering my contest and i wish you the best of luck! CarnalNineTailedFox
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I wasn't really looking for heartache in my contest.. but I could feel the emotion in this. Nice job with the rhyming as well.
Thanks for entering and good luck.
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Amazing
I can relate to this poem and i likeies it. Great job. Good luck
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Judge says
I will still protect you
I will still give my life
Damn us and our everlasting feelings for people we are no longer with! I loved those lines anlong with the rest of the poem! thank you for entering and good luck!
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really true...Ugh doesn't this feeling suck?
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Nice piece, thanks for entering hun!
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thanks for entering
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so, you'e the evil in this hmm..I'm sure that can;t be true.....evil couldn't produce such beauty...and this was beautiful...I'm sorry for You're pain I know how hard loosing someone you love can be and break ups suck but keep writting.
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this was a great write and i can really relate to what you are saying and feeling in this but I also really like the way that you used metaphors in this poem...keep writting your very talented and good luck in the contest
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AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME AWESOME
i have lost my words to compliment...how beautifully you have revealed all your feelings and love for her...Is it the same Grace of Ap, i dont know, actually i dont even bother, the thing is I am so much moved! awesome...simply marvellous the way you have present your love.....very very very great job....
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wish you good luck!!!!
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Wow
this is so beautiful...it made me want to cry, but i didn't. great flow and use of metaphors. Good luck in the contest. -
this is really romantic and sad at the same time which makes me like it even more so good job with writing this poem i luv it, i think this is one of the best poems i have read of your so far good job
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Romantically depressing. Though still a good write. It's sad.
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Je t’aime toujours, mon ange
.........................................For those that don't know french, that means I will always love you my angel.. Very well put. I love this poem. It is very heartfelt and very sincere. I love the way the ending rhymed. You've done an excellent job. The ending is perfect. Vous avez fait un travail parfait sur ce poème. Je merci pour entrer mon concours. Vous avez fait la liste de finaliste....(just in case you don't speak french except that one line... You've done a perfect job on this poem. I thank you for entering my contest. You've made the finalist list....) Kassie. -
This is really good. Your words are really strong in this write!
Thanks so much for entering, this is a great write.
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