One will fly any distance
while another slips between the cracks.
One will sacrifice it's existance
just to watch all time elapse.
One will open itself to your eyes
while another falls to shadow.
One will reveal it's melting ice
just to drown in it's puddle's shallow.
One will find it's way to you
while the other drops in hiding.
One will travel any curving road
just to watch life's ever providing.
One will swim through any troubles
while the other fails to go on.
One will press forward in optimism
just to watch the obstacles be run.
One will find itself in your palm
while the other is dropped below.
One will sew it's sides to your skin cells
just to be part of what you know.
One of these shards broken from my heart
will forever be beside you watching,
while the other comes crying back to me
to be with me as I fade...
Author notes
I see the two shards as black and white, and my whole self fading as the gray area in between.
I hope that this does not fall off topic but if it does I understand just the same.
A contest entry
- Black and white....................... by Starswhispers.
500 points, ended February 15, 2007, 20 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I wanted to give you some applauds it is a nice poem.
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A lovely piece full of sad tenderness, you have created a good rythme with the use of repetition, it is not exactly an opposite persepective more an entity divided in two, i really like the softness in it. the blow of a soft desperate love song.
Thank you for entering my contest and good luck.
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Wow.....
Wow you are really good I loved this poem.Good job.Keep writing.
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Thanks so much for reading as well as commenting PoetryLover, it's greatly appreciated.
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wow, just wow.... I really love the lines " One will sew it's sides to your skin cells just to be part of what you know." I love you hunny!
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Aww- thanks hon! I'm happy you finally got an account here! Isn't it fun?
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yea it's pretty fun.... I like doing this in creative writting (lol)
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but not in a bad way
it was a really good write and until the very end youre rhyming was kick ass....the end was kick ass too its just your rhyming stoped. but i loved the way you used your words and you havent had a poem up in a while so this made me happy
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lol- kickass is good!! Yeah...I stopped rhyming at the very end because I wanted the end to be symbolic of...well- the end of all things for this character. Thanks for commenting hon!
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Wow this is awesome! I totally connected with it
in more ways than two. It also fit very well with
the background, which is my bio page background
so that made it mean more to me as well...
and well... I love it.
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Thanks so much for reading and commenting, Jason. I'm so glad that you were able to connect with the poem, and lol yes- I like the background too. I like the two separate sides of the heart defined in ice and fire. Thanks again!!
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