feeble and weak
never able to speak
to find a voice
for unspoken emotions
unheard of fears
and suppressed tears
in her room she is alone
and the razors edge
helps her to express
she knows not how to convey
unspoken emotions
so she falls prey
to undying devotion
she feels she must obey
the razors edge
to its aura
she falls prey…
Author notes
Not too hard to figure out what it's about. I think this one kinda "flows"
A contest entry
- The Darkest of Your Thoughts! by Nicky Skittles.
825 points, ended November 12, 2007, 12 entries
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I really like the title and hows its involved and portrayed in the poem. I could feel the poem.
"so she falls prey
to undying devotion
she feels she must obey" - I love this part.
Awesome write!
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i do agree the flow is great my dear!
it is hard to be inbetween such hurt with life and a razor great poem! -
This is short yet flows very well and expresses emotions. Thanks for entering and good luck.
~nicky
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awesomeee
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pshhh i love this =]
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Dark, so dark. The rhyming flows beautifully. Great Job.
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Yeah, I think it definitely flows. I love it.
"she knows not how to convey
unspoken emotions
so she falls prey
to undying devotion"
That is a brilliant couple of lines. Unspoken emotions are what make the world go around...not...that didn't even make sens...lol. Anywho, I loved the poem. It flowed really well. Keep up the great writes.
*snap*
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