Melissa
From your ancient past
I plead as a friend
Come from your place
of sullen dread and regret
Close away those distant days
leave your tears with yesterday
Enough has been said and thought
the penance paid over endless days
Walk with me in words... free of sorrow
to the wonders of a day unknown
a day we call... tomorrow
See all as it can be
your precious lovely dream
Lift your eyes to the days unmade
come with me to your secret place
High upon a hill deep in your mind
a home... a dream... of happy times
A charming cabin
covered in the frosting of snow
See yourself
in the early morning
Watching the glorious colors
overtake... snow covered mountains
Ponder the day free of care
breathe the delicious mountain air
All your dreams are waiting there
In that time... ask your self
what shall I do with this glorious day
how shall I play
Perhaps for the first time
make angels... wave your arms to God
Lay and look above
drenched in the clear blue sky
Make a prayer to him
for the freedom from your past
As a friend I ask
Run to your dream
An archer draws his bow
by his eye he says... where the arrow will go
We become what we believe
This... can be your dream
LeeL
Author notes
There is a place for Joy in every life
and we will certinally become what we believe
Whatever we see and preceve
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A contest entry
- Make me happy!! by Molassis.
430 points, ended January 18, 2007, 18 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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Sometimes it can be the hardest of jobs to rise above the station life has placed you in, and yet so many never quit trying. For the entirity of their lives. This poem explains the concept and reasoning behind it very well. Good stuff.
Rick
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Hi Rick
I don`t how you found this
but I appreate your reading it
I thank you
Rick
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Gorgeous-
This is one Gorgeous Masterpiece You have penned my Friend for a Gorgeous Woman with a Spirit that soars
and after inhaling this~
I imagine it will soar even more
Thank You for sharing Your Inspiration and lifting
wings to fly over clouded skies~
Keep that ink flowing~~
and Your Creative Mind going~~
Best wishes to You in the contest!
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Desire
I always have a dream
and when I reach it, I look for another
I what this for her
To look to the horizen and see what is possable
Thank you for reading
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Rick,
A very nice friend you are to me... thank you for this lovely write...
It's very beautiful... touching and sweet...
I guess you are right in that we do become what we believe in a way...
Excellent write...
~Melissa
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Melissa
Thank you for your kind words
Every day we write our story
I have had to change my chapters several times
If we do this well, and find the good, and adapt
it will make for a beautifull ending
They will praise us, over our stone
Thank you for saying Excellent
Your Friend
Rick
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Rick,
What beautiful words of inspiration...leaving the pain of the past behind and chosing to open the door for a happy future.
This is my favorite;
Perhaps for the first time
make angels... waving your arms to God
and
An archer drawes his bow
by his eye he says... where the arrow will go
We become what we believe
This... can be your dream
well said, good luck in this contest and I hope this makes Melissa happy!
as you already know, the spelling needs help...I will send you a message with those corrections.
Michelle
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Michelle
Thank you for the spelling corrections
You said my intent exactly
Good thinking
Rick
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nice write..!! i liked the imagery... did u purposely write the spellings like that..?? either way its a gr8 poem...!!!
well done n keep writin!!
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Rebel
Thank you for saying well done
I am a spelling fool
Thank God for the Spelling Farie
Rick
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This is gorgeous. It is a promise of life that only two can build.
I love the archer reference. Brought to mind Orion and Robin Hood all together.
Not your usual work, but outstanding just the same!
Marianne
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Marianne
Not my usual and therefore more difficult to craft
I will work on it more later
I am short on time
I thank you
rick
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this is so true written with insight and truth through out it. it isn't anyone else that can make u happpy only us and the energy of thought passed always comes back to create the persona we are becoming well done
Love and light,
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Blaze
Thank you for seeing so far into my words
You are blessed with insite
I thank you for reading
Rick
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I was trying to figure out if this was a personal love poem to someone , or just a contest entry. Not that it really matters though
but I do believe that the hostesses name is Melissa
and I am sure she will appreciate this. May I suggest you run it through spellcheck though.We all make typos in our haste, but they can be a barrier to the reader as well as to the flow of a poem.....I for one stumble on them and it breaks my concentration and the mood that the poem might have sat. I do wish you the very best of luck...this year, as well as in this contest,
reenie
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rebel
I can`t spell
I am waiting for my sprlling fairy to read and aid me
Thank you for saying great
Rick
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I like the tone of this write, not too preachy and not too loose with the title that it's watered down. Very nice - best of luck in the contest.
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Casser
Thank you for your thoughtfull comment
I tried to moderate my words
Rick
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This is lovely, Rick. I'm sure Melissa will love this, and it should bring peace to her. Love and hugs, Patricia
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Come back and read
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the beginning of a wonderful write. this is going somewhere grand. i love what you wrote so far.
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Oh my...anticipation...from the title alone, I know I will enjoy it for I believe that our beliefs determine our actions and are the foundation for our emotions.
No pressure...Just hurry. -
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Read Please
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I thank you
It is christlizing in my mind
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I agree with the title... but not really sure about this? Will you be adding a poem or is this your entry?
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My Friend
Call the past what it is... the past
Live now for the day that can be
The begining of your dream
Love, Rick -
Melissa
I noticed there were now only 9 remaining openings of 20. I wanted to make sure I reserved one spot for my verse so I have time to make the words in peace.
This is not my usual writing so the words do not come to me freely and I need time to find them carefully.
I hope to give you more than a temperay smile. This will not be about love.
I thank you for asking
Rick
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