A man who has lost the plan, I flee a prison of pain;
A lion on the lam, running down the lane.
Stopping at the crossroads on the corner of love and fate;
Knowing you're the one and hoping I’m not too late.
Take my hand as I stand at the entrance to Heart’s End;
Share my soul, make me whole, my forever friend.
Make it right, be the light, that shines again and again;
Show me love from above, meet me at Heart’s End.
I search my soul to sort this out, but head and heart cannot agree;
Upon my knees I cry and shout “Please God, set me free”.
My mind is sure I must move on, my heart knows I should stay;
I just know I’m real real gone, and have long since lost my way.
Share the load on the road, together from Heart’s End;
Take the ride side by side, from now until the end.
Make me right, be my light that shines again and again;
Show me love from above, meet me at Heart’s End.
It’s time at last to purge the past, to face the future too;
I’m on the road, the die is cast, my fate is tied to you.
I stand and wait at the gate, for you to rescue me;
Hand in hand, we’ll find that land, where lover’s wander free.
Take my heart as we start, together from Heart’s End;
Share my life, be my wife, my forever friend.
Hold me tight, be my light, that shines again and again;
Share a love from above, from now until Heart’s End.
Please feel free to comment..and to read my other work
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Excellent
This is such a beautiful poem, with excellent rhyming scheme.. The emotions flow from each and every line.. I enjoyed reading it a lot.. how ever I have one little concern, in the line "I just know I’m real real gone" The real coming twice breaks the smooth flow just a little.. Great write, do keep writing
Love,
~ Lonely
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very interesting rhyme scheme you've managed to pull off here
" Share the load on the road, together from Heart’s End;
Take the ride side by side, from now until the end.
Make me right, be my light that shines again and again;
Show me love from above, meet me at Heart’s End.
It’s time at last to purge the past, to face the future too;
I’m on the road, the die is cast, my fate is tied to you.
I stand and wait at the gate, for you to rescue me;
Hand in hand, we’ll find that land, where lover’s wander free.
Take my heart as we start, together from Heart’s End;
Share my life, be my wife, my forever friend.
Hold me tight, be my light, that shines again and again;
Share a love from above, from now until Heart’s End."
great internal rhymes, and great ending stanzas!
mike, aka jonathan wikkins -
Lyrical, tight, very well done. Heart and hope, waiting at the crossroads of love and fate. And still the head and the heart disagree.
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I'm very impressed (contest title)
This is another super good (real) poem. The real-poetry type poem. It rhymes. It has rhythm. It sings to you. It's funky. Get down.
We're all headin' to Heart's End
Lovin' is a human trend
With heart breaks, we try to mend,
But we're done-in in the end.
Bop Bop -
This is very lyrical and could be a song I think, excellent flow and unique phrasing make this one a keeper. Would love to hear it to music. Great work Bunny
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a lion on the lamb...I could take that a number of ways.
it's certainly a clever line. -
" Take my hand as I stand at the entrance to Heart’s End;
Share my soul, make me whole, my forever friend.
Make it right, be the light, that shines again and again;
Show me love from above, meet me at Heart’s End."
The phrase that struck me the most, stirred me the deepest, is "my forever friend"...That's the best & only way to hold precious Love, I think...My late sweetheart & I were best friends; even after 14 years together, we could still manage to stay up all night talking about anything & everything...& we were always in each other's corners...This is an impressive penning, to be sure...Well done, Mat... Wanda
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beautiful...
Asdzaa Nadleehe
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Now this is alove lyric I could get into, the thought of heart's end is beautiful, together finding that one place where all beauty abounds in the love of two people. Can here the gentle strains of this love song playing in my head. Great song.
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very touching piece of love. well written and expressed - great rhyme and flow throughout. thank you for entering my contest!
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Was that meant to be a song? It's got great rhythm and rhyme. Lovely piece
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Two thumbs up!
GREAAAAAAAAAAAAAT...
Enticingly creative! beautifully written ...
What a lucky woman
Its was awesome. It was wonderful, it speaks of the heart and the timelessness of love and really tells the person you want to, the depths of your love!!!
I love this,it has emotions and it really touched me. This is a really good LYRICS b/c if u really do love someone then they should know how much u feel about them and how much u love and dont want 2 lose them for the rest of ur life....
Whewwww.... your writing so touching that sounds like you really wrote it from your heart....
~~GRACE~~
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THAT WAS SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!YOU ARE VERY TALENTED KEEP UP THE GOOD WORK!!!
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This is freakin' beautiful (know what I hate most about these typed (and then read) comments is that sometimes you can't possibly express your enthusiasm excitedly enough without the luxury of facial expression and/or sound-you know what I mean?-yeah I know..crazy chic ranting again ;))
ANYWAY :D I know, I always say the same thing, but whatever, I mean it everytime...I LOVE this, like the comment before me said, you can hear the song in the words on this page, it is perfect! And such a beautiful story, beautiful thoughts, singing from the page. I'm in love :) Definitely has a sigh factor!!
Dreamy.
I wish I could write lyrics, nope...but that's okay, you go on with yours and I'll go on admiring them!
Dam my comments get long, sorry about that, I must learn to shut up! But you know how you want to try to let someone know how what they wrote made you feel, but words just don't seem like enough...yeah, that's how I get sometimes...oh well!Don't ever stop...you have a wonderful gift and a beautiful heart!
~Michele
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Aww...
I could actually sing this in my head...so they're good lyrics. I think it's sweet, and I like several of the verses...or...the lyrics...especially the ones that have the words "Heart's End" in it. I love the title and how you used it in the song. I found myself singing this in my head. Great job.
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