Buds in the spring
Flowers soon to be
Perfume will bring
Buds in the spring
Now awakening
I am a tree
Buds in the spring
Flowers soon to be.
In me birds sing
Sing happily
Joy to all bring
In me birds sing
Herald the spring
I am a tree
In me birds sing
Sing happily
Bare in the fall
Sky seen through me
No leaves at all
Bare in the fall
Branches reach tall
I am a tree
Bare in the fall
Sky seen through me.
Author notes
Tree.
Written May 30th, 2003
A contest entry
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What did you think
Comments
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wonderfully lyrical, almost like a chime of bells. The ideas are simply yet beautifully expressed. Thank you for your entry.
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simple and subtle thanks for the entry
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This is beautifully written. I like your take on trees. I love when the leaves change color in fall. Enjoyed the read! Thank you for entering my contest.
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I like this very much. Sweet and simply stated with great imagery. Flows effortlessly. Delightful to read. Thank you for entering.
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Nice!
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This just had a very calming affect, what bothered me though was
"In me birds sing
Sing happily"
I guess I just don't like the repeating word right next to each other. It just doesn't sound right when you say it out loud for me. Good job though. Nice feeling throughout the entire thing. -
Very nicely written! I like it when author's let you see through something else's eyes. I enjoyed this read!
Emma ^_^
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I was really impressed with your poem and that you stuck to the exact form. The only thing I saw was that you changed your meter which, with what I know about Triolets is that, you are free to do that. Great topic too!
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this is a good poem, made me smile, thanks for sharing, keep up the awesome poetry, ang best of luck in this contest.
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this is a really great poem and i loved it you are a great writer keep it up thanx for entering and good luck you are a truly great writer keep it up!!!!!!!!! thanx for sharing with all of us here at allpoetry really enjoyed reading this poem
love ya
~*Becca*~
you are a great writer
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Considering the many seasons of the tree, all of them standing there, going nowhere, it is fitting that the repetition exists while events happen in and around its branches. For a tree-hugger, that is an evocative piece of writing.
Terry -
Wow. This was great. The flow was amazing. Great job. Good luck!!!
Forever
Tempest
Elmo -
babybird.The rhyme is not forced, I did it willingly.
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I think the rhyme is rather forced in this one. I'm not really getting any imagery from it either. It might be just the format and the rhyme scheme.
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good
be the tree - lol I think every drama student has heard that in class or in some movie with clichés!
I'm not all that familiar with triolet so I will solely comment on what I thought of the write over all.
it was consistant! if you did triolet correctly- well it shows and if not, at least you were consistantly wrong
I've come across a few triolet so this looks correct to me! hehe
but I did thoroughly enjoy you becoming and englobing the tree.
~comes at you with chainsaw~ betcha didn't see this one coming! mwhahaha
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i like it and not to break the string, "thank you for entering my contest and good luck" the repetitions are really neet, what is a triolet? good luck
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I love the repetition. I use repetition alot in my pieces. It is really fantastic imagery of a tree. While I was reading this peace, I couldnt help but be drawn through all of the seasons. Thank you so much for entering my contest!!
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ooh, really cool! like the repitition a lot. don't forget to put "take out the piece 'the peace'" in your author's comments, though. thanks for entering my contest!
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jadedlady This is not a Pantoum,it is three Triolets combined in one poem.Thanks for comment on this and other poems.Bill
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Is this a pantoum? Anyway I really loved it. Very nice write. I can really feel what it is like to be a tree. Thanks for sharing.
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Good job--I really like "in me the birds sing" Good write. Thanks for entering my contest and good luck.
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