Feasting upon empty promises,
Flase hopes and white lies,
Yet white is the darkest shade,
In this punishing game,
A game of hearts,
Black as the midnight sky,
And as cold as the deepest cave,
Ready to surround me in its cruel vision,
Of a love most pure and whole,
I now truely know what it feels like,
To be drowning in my own world,
Trying to pretend that
Everything
Is
Okay
Author notes
This is something I'm going through now, but to be different and to give me a challenge I tried to write it as if I was the other person.
A contest entry
- Fill Your Lungs With Water And Float To The Bottom Of The Bath by s h a r d s.
380 points, ended January 21, 2007, 22 entries
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Please tell me what you think
Comments
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I like how you tried to write from the others point.. very well done and thanks for entering
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well i love it and i know how you feel, i'm so used to pretending everthing is okay when its not
i loved the last part
"I now truely know what it feels like,
To be drowning in my own world,
Trying to pretend that
Everything
Is
Okay"
keep it up and good luck
love
daisy
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