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'Taste At Eventide'

Suspending in mid-air,
iced stawberries
                spread
                  over puffed
                    folds of heavy cream
above the flaming
                 ball of butter
                  that melts into
                    the opaque blue bowl~

Senses quenched,
           'tis a silent treat
              before hungry eyes!

Author notes

Actually, this was written for a metaphor to a sunset using a food as it's symbol. Hence...TWO senses.:)
Written May 30th, 2003

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  • Knight70
    September 20, 2007
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    exquisite metaphor.....

    I never would have guessed without your author notes. What a wonderful metaphor for a sunset. I am captivated by such elegant poetry.


  • J Rhys Davies
    March 30, 2004
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    Cookie, this was awesome. I read your notes and how it was written as a metaphor, it explained to me the meaning of the ball of butter melting into the blue bowl. That was brilliant! Not to mention, it made me incredibly hungry for my favorite dessert; mint chocolate chip ice cream.

  • myrataal silver member
    June 1, 2003
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    Oh Dianne! I am gaining on my waistline by merely reading your delicious poem! Yum-yum. If poetry gets this tasty, I better get myself in shape

    Hugs.

    Myra

  • June 1, 2003
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    good good.

    holy crud yes...
    i could smell them.
    thats a sick little trick you have going there. I think you should win... mmm... I love senses.
    -blankangel

  • Sprite silver member
    May 31, 2003
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    You have me drooling...

  • Sherry gold member
    May 30, 2003
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    Marvelously Delicious

    Oh this is wonderful Cookie excellent and tasty dear- reminded me of a poem I wrote Ice Cream Skies course yours has the season flavoring hehe..Creative and a lovely piece...I like your title also good luck to you. Terrific entry!! Love,Sherry

  • symitar Moderators member
    May 30, 2003
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    oh my, this sounds so delicious! What a wonderful sensual picture you painted! Great vision of red and white and yellow and blue and soft folds and clear bowls and how I wish i had this sitting in front of me!And I love the hungry eyes line! Simply delicious! Thank you for such a tantalizing piece!
  • CrimsonUniverse
    May 30, 2003
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    ohhhhhh i LOOOOVE strawberries toooooooooooooooooo gimme some!
    ::sulks:: Hmm.. wonder if the store closed yet... Nicely
    penned

    Jen

  • VanyaVilya
    May 30, 2003
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    oooohhhh... mmmm'mmmmmmmmmm.... I love strawberries!! Oh, this is yummy. It's making me hungry. hehehe. anyway, this is a beautiful poem. It's images and tastes brought to mind are wonderful. Thank you so much for entering this. I loved it.
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