Becalm, the wishful surge of beckoning gasp
ever leading to those secret night strokes that never last.
Open the wisdom of an inner bosom's beauty so glistening
stirred by the tingles felt as an ethereal whispering.
Rise by soul plumes towards the dawn's drenching call
creating the sense of angelic nature within us all.
Learning to see light's purest refraction in clarity
in the silhouetted woeful tales of disparity.
Beyond the seeping outlines of mortal mar
we each lust to be the essence of a perfect star.
A contest entry
- Spiritual Inspiration by mysticstorm.
450 points, ended January 7, 2007, 6 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Prewrite Phenomenon #2 by Ryno.
300 points, ended February 9, 2007, 27 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Give Me Your Best by Brandon Ashley.
307 points, ended March 10, 2007, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - 24 Hour Contest---Enter Fast by WhollySurrendered.
475 points, ended March 17, 2007, 33 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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penman... I have studied your work for a couple years now and it really excites me to know you have entered this contest ( don't get too excited, I will still be a fair judge... lol ) . Having a long recovery process to relearn everything after coming out of a coma it is not always easy to decide who is a good teacher and who is not, a couple years ago I decided that your writes were a good source of teaching and have studied them along with a few select other writers. I may still have a long way to go, but it has been through your writings ( and theirs) and your committment to excellence that has gotten me as far as I have come. Thank you for that!
I will be removing this prewrite from the contest and making a notation on your fresh write that you have been validated as a previous gold winner, thank you for following the contest guidelines.
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great write. thanks for entering
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Thank you for the great comment.
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Exceptional
I adored this piece, wonderful fluid movement and the rhyme is exceptional. great work in a very captivating piece. Good luck in this contest.
Bunny
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Gorgeous-
A breath of fresh air within this Masterpiece You have weaved~
Definitely Inspiring to the core and lifts Spirit up as high as it could possibly go
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and my love
~ Desire~*~
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Oh wow darling, you really are showing your bias now. You love me so much you commented on this one twice. Um, do you think anyone will suspect about us?
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Did I really?
I looked to see if I did and my comment must have played hide-n-seek
Ooooooooooooooooops...
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Bravo!
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Thank you Ryan.
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thank you for entering the contest, but please respond to this comment with the option number and a quote on hope or trust, both were supposed to be in your poem's comment box! Thanks! Good luck
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Wow, powerful, bold and rich. Amazingly strong and moving. Congrats on your award Great write
--RYAN
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Hi Ryan.
Thanks for the great comment. This was quite a surprise to win for me.
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Very well written. Wonderful flow and word choice used throughout. A beautiful inspirational write it's self. Deep and calming to read.
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Wow, thank you for the gold. I was so amazed. Considering the competition, I was completely surprised. And thank you for having such a great contest.
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soothing
breath-taking..
Beautiful imagery from beginning to end..
Your amazing talent shine..God bless, Brenda
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Thank you Brenda. I was kind of caught off guard on this poem. I didn't honestly think I did that well.
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Powerful-
Wow- What a verse You have penned my Friend
An Inspiration to inhale with images to satiate
the senses~
Can't help but smile after taking the sights
all in the Mind~
Thank You for sharing Your Talent!
Best wishes to You in the contest
Many blessings too
and much love~ Desire~*~
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Hi Desire. Thanks for the great comment. I'm so glad to hear from you and know you liked this entry.
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