I've missed out on winning over your smiles.
Sharing tips on our individual styles.
Telling you whats on my mind and in my heart.
These days I'm not sure where to start.
I've missed out on the mom I wanted, when little.
Between grandpa and you, I was in the middle.
My loyalties torn between two people I adore.
Unbeknownst to me, he had more in store.
I've missed out on sharing my first kiss.
My first love when my heart was in bliss.
Not realizing that some day I'd be alone.
Where I should start is not known.
I've missed out on expressing just how I need you.
Lets start all over, everything brand new.
Ten years is too long to be so very apart.
I guess "I love you" is where I will start.
Please tell me what you think
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Beautiful ..
Great work. Beautiful words for a beautiful emotion.
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Ahhh Sweet
Sweet words that touch the heart.
joe
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You really write poems with passion.
I love the way you write
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this is such an amazing poem... holds so much emotional value. It's very different from any other poem i have read. The last to lines definately had to be the best. I am going through the same thing with my father.... I haven't seen him for 10 years, I remember him so well too, it really hurts that he could leave the way he did. Your poem dug up so many buried memories.. painful to read but so moving. It's an honor to be able to read these.
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Very moving.
I like how you seem to keep your poems short, and yet have so much meaning on ever word. I can also say that I can realit to this poem as well. I am trying to start a new, with my mom as well. I can hope things get better with your mom, and you. Keep on writing.
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Original!
Hi!
Princess!
This is a hit!
This line uncovers the depth of your emotion on how you’ve missed her and you want to break that barrier.
(I guess "I love you" is where I will start.)
Sounds original!
Take care!
Scarzat
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This poem is very sad, but you depicted your feelings toward your mom and your longing to start a relationship with her very well. This is another one that I think I can relate to. Relationships can be very hard to start at first. I really liked the last line. This shows that even though you may have had a rough past with her, you still love her, and want to be close to her. Your rhymes are yet again absolutely perfect, and your flow is constant.
This is a great poem, and you did a very nice job in writing it. Take care, keep up the fantastic work!
~Manic
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Thank You so much for your feedback, its much appreciated.
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Thank You for this one, it means a lot. I really appreciate your comment. You are very good at writing comments. I could learn from you.
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Wonderfully written. It can be difficult to start a love relationship. I should know, I'm a little shy and my lover can vouch for that. All in all, A great poem.
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Thank you so much for your kind response to my poem. Things between my mom and I are much better now. Take care.
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a deeply moving poem
The rhym and rhythem is perfect. Very nice pen. Keep up the great work
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Thank You, I appreciate you reading and commenting
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this is a very nice poem. i love the ending.
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Exquisite
This is so sad at first and you hesitancy as to where to start is quite understandable. I'm sorry if you've actually had to go through this experience. The last stanza really lifts my spirits. I can see you have a sweet and caring nature (not to mention talent!), you have chosen the perfect solution. Some are afraid to say I love you, not you! Take care, Poetess
and welcome to Ambicadu! Deb
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This was so enjoyable to read. It gave such a feeling of sadness while I read it, yet offered hope at the end. Well done.
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This is a very nice poem. I can see why so many comments and am sure I would only be repeating something if I left another one. So, I'll just say....I like it!
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Perhaps I love you is a great place to start. This is a great write and shares a great deal of wisdom. Your rhymes were nicely placed, not at all forced. There was a good flow to the imagery in this poem. Great Job!
Azlyn
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Where to start? First let me welcome you to AP and hope you make many new friends here. Now on to your poem. I think it was a beautiful but sad piece and very emotional as well. I loved the rhyme as well and it flowed really smooth. Great job and hope to hear more from you.
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mm you made me reflect on my own life! darnnit!
haha good write.
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this is a really sweet poem! i wasnt expecting that ending which made it even more special!
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Another beautiful Song..
You write amazingly and the rhyning flows so nicely.. I am not good with rhyming.. (Nor spelling) But I have to say I admire your work..
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Wow this is simply amazing the rhyming exquisite and it flows wonderfully you've penned a masterpiece Bravo
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Great Job
nice write can be taken in may ways and pins it at the end and thats were we should all start.
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Wow...
this is a beautiful poem... just trying to find the perfect moment to start a new friendship, to give someone a second chance and have your own. I love it and will read it again and again.
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This is beautiful. I love the last two lines!
I love the rhyming.
XxX
It's beautiful. I'm sorry I don't have much else to say beacuse the sadness and beauty of it make it an excellent poem.
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This is so sad and thought provoking;( Ten years is such a long time to pick y=up the opieces again, but one has to make the first move, which you have. I do hope your heart is filled with love and I wish you all the best.
A very emotional write indeed.
Gaylene
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This is so thoughtful and moving. I am sobbing too. What a sad story for you. I hope that the ending is a beginning for the both of you. Well done my friend. This took courage, and guts. You should be proud of yourself. AMAZING!!!! Keep penning my friend. Thanks for sharing it with me.
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The best place to always start is with an I love you. Excellent poem Well done
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I like it. I am not always fond of rhyming but I think it enhances this piece.
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great
ahh, very nice poem. great job on the rymes =).
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i guess it can be hard when forced to chose between things... so i know how you feel... it is full of truth and reality and that is what attracted me to continue to read it... kudos and well done...
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i really liked this poem.i loved the first stanza. i guess i may not be seeng the same meaning as you meant, but i thought it was really sad and heartfelt, and i hope things get better for you. please comment on my poems as well, i think you have read some of thelonelytree's poems and she's a really good friend of mine.
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i really like your peice, powerful and emotonial. well written, well done
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this poem is so sad and heartfelt 
I can relate to this. I hope things get better for you. Your words were strong and powerful. Keep writting you are very talented and thanks for your comment on my poem simply another fuck up it means alot to me
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Nicely done! Very well written, and nice flow. Such a great write about missing out on a relationship. I love you is usually a good place to start.
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A beautiful piece...so deep and wonderfully written. Every line is so perfect. The imagery was beautiful, the emotions so wonderfully expressed and the imagery splashed everywhere with so much beauty. I loved the last line so much. What can I say, except for the fact that this is such a wonderful piece written with an amazing talent! Beautiful work and do keep it up!!
Love
Poetess99
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Wow, So deep
What an excellent piece. So much imagery. Great rhyming. This is so emotional. Well done to you! Thanks for the comment you left for me. Regards. -
AWESOME
yeah this is great princess dove great imagery and the emotions where delivered well
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Nice rhyme...
I had to re-read to be sure it did rhyme all the way through. That's the sign of a good poem. When the reader doesn't realize that is is rhymed.
Very strong emotions penned here.
Thank you for sharing this.
Buddy
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WOw
Alsome poem this is you did a gorgeous job with poem way to go keep up the marvelous work dat u do cause it amazing ya talent is alsome and I know how ya feel with this poem. Ttyl great once again keep da ink flowing i do da same
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this poem is very sweet i love the words you used i wont choose a fav bit because i like the whole poem. keep up the good work.
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just dreaming piece with some thing so real and cute
it really touched my heart
ohh its so beautiful in every way
i liked it alot
by
the poet of hearts and beautiful words
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This is such a great poem, full of lots of emotion yet very sad sorry to hear you missed out on alot in your life, hope things get better for you. Your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully throughout the entire poem. Well done dear poet
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wow... I am going through this right now... and this poem just... it's amazing.. wow.. please write new poems... more... please.. *speechless*
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wow...the things we go through as we grow older, life is never what they say it is in the story books. Great write.
~Agony
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This is really sweet. I enjoyed reading this.
In line four, you used a 't' instead of 'e' in 'sure.'
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Really touching
Damn you Princess Dove...you've made me blub.
Actually...there's nothing wrong with being moved to tears is there...it's nice to know I 'feel'
And it's plainly obvious you do too...you've communicated that so well...and that's a beautiful thing...you are both loving and lovely...thanks xxxx
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this is beautiful although full of tear-laden lines....
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i love it!!! im sorry you havent seen your mom in so long =[ that must be really hard. really good poem and keep writing more!
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(tears) it's perfect, deep, in that special place in ourselves where "love" is, very nice written. You're a beautiful expressive writer who touches others. Thanks for writing this and sharing.
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I liked your words. It sound like music to my ears. Like a song. It is touchind. I liked the line I guess" I Love you" is where I will start. great write. Can you give me feedback on my poem Love of my life.
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I love you is a perfect place to start!!!! It's probably just as hard for your mom, being apart, as it is for you. Great writing and keep up the good work!!!!
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this is really good amazing piece of work
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This is wonderful and sweet! Great work here and thanks for sharing this. Keep it up!
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Wonderful! I really like this... And I really hope to read more from you!
Peace out!
Cassie
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Very nice poem which reads easily and with a new view on love. I read it out loud to look for cacophony and found none though it was hard to pronounce unbeknownst, which might also feel as too formal a word for the simple language you ise so well.
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nice poem
this is a really nice poem you've penned, full of love and sincerity, very well done,
kind regards,
floorboards
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I love you is always a good place to start! In this case also a beautiful finish to your story. Well written and emotionally charged. Well done dear poet.
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Great poem. Filled with much passion. Great efffort. I enjoyed this piece very much. Thank you for sharing your comments.
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ace poem, really expressive, like the rhyming
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This is good! Awesome arrangement of talent and thoughts!
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Such a very beautiful poem. Where to start!! What a perfect title. I think everyone has moments like these where you need to start over and you just don't know how to begin. Great job, I really enjoyed this!!
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Very good
Your poem is beatifully written and heartfelt. I love the ending because that would be a good place for anyone to start. GOOD JOB! keep up the good work! -
This is a very good poem you have penned here, your rhythm and rhyme flowed beautifully throughout the entire poem well done dear poet
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"I Love You" Excellent Start!
Princessdove, This poem touched my heart deeply. It is sad and yet filled with beauty that came from the bottom of your heart. It is where we write the best from. You expressed your emotions very well and I wish you the best going forward as you make this start. I want to thank you for sharing a piece of yourself with all of us. It shows a loving and caring heart, it's all over this page. I will leave you with a standing ovation to go along with my applause. Love and God bless, Joyce 
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I Love You ... Always a good start
Wow, one could right volumes about your poem and yet at the same time left speechless. Of all the work I have read by you, although recently new here, this poem is exceptional. I believe the closer you get to the heart of Love, the love our father above speaks of, the harder it is to find the words at times. However, with this poem, I believe you have captured a start.... What a beautiful heart you have! If this was personal in nature, may god bless you and your family. If just an expression of a thought was written then you captured it well.
Lula
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wow!! I really like this one, Show's emotion and has a really strong ending to it. I love you is commenley used in poems but with this one it's meaningfull and very expressave. good job *thums up*
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is this to your mom? or who is this to?
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im sorry to say this, but im going to have to remove your poem from the contest. if you read the rules it clearly states that in order to be in the contest, you must write "GRANITE" in the authors note section so i know you have read the rules. feel free to enter another poem but this one will be removed from the contest.
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What a super start, there couldn't be a better place. I hope she will too.
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Always a good place to start...
I don't know where to start either; congratulations on a succinct poem or sympathy on the topic. "I love you" is usually a good place to start [with the possible exceptions of financial transactions or physician appointments], so: I liked your rhyme scheme and enjoyed the meaning. Nice work.
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