Burned Bridges
Almost to that point where the flame will kiss the wood
Watch what we once had become ashes where it stood
One word away from disaster’s finalizing goodbye
A simple fight and it’s over. Not one more retry.
A single step made towards the wrong direction
And you can see it burn in my eyes reflection
Another pain, another tear and it will be our last
Left to reminisce upon our blazing past
Bridges aren’t far off from burning to the ground
Smoke and ash will tell the story of what we never found
Yet I know the truth is if they ever were consumed.
I’d swim underneath where they stood to get back to you.
Author notes
Granite....
A contest entry
- Poems Worth Reading, Let Me Feel Your Emotions!!! by Kali-Mus.
450 points, ended January 9, 2007, 22 entries
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This was very well written and very well put. The Imagery was very good, so good I could almost feel the heat. Message me if you want your score, make sure to include the name of your poem. Thanks, bye.
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ok, i see where you wrote granite, so dont worry, i like this poem, very good imagery, "to the point where the flame will kiss the wood" thats what got me to read this poem, it is amazing, good job and thanks for entering
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oh wow. this is so deep. i really liked it. where did u get the idea from of using bridges? its fantastic. nice write! keep posting!
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I love this piece, and you have also formatted it really well, just like embers in a dying fire, which relates to the piece.
I love the imagery 'Almost to that point where the flame will kiss the wood' and thole piece was such a perfect illustration of something so beautiful and deep dying, just like a dying fire and the idea of something really hot and intense turning to ashes in front of your eyes 'Left to reminisce upon our blazing past' was emotively described.
The last line was a great way to end it... It is important to not lose hope even when love is near lost... Because true love is a flame that never dies.
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