The Winds will not stop,
The night shouted still,
Her dance was seen;
sky mope wondering what joy.
Her wings spread from east to west;
Her hair fall north to south,
Even the risen sun could not hold her steps,
But she danced cloud in blues.
Music not heard,
beat not drummed; still her breath was felt;
In the way she moved,
Light so bright still her shadow seen,
Passing the night, never could be deemed.
What joy is this, that horse's can't hold
Even in trumpet blown for war,
As I gaze the god's;
trying to hold her still,
Yet louder the melody sounds.
She is a woman
A woman in love, can't you see?
Even the God's can't hold;
A woman in love,
For the songs of love is all she hears.
Please tell me what you think
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very good
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Her wings spread from east to west;
Her hair fall north to south,
I love this idea very imaginativ very creative such beautiful write
i want you to comment on my work too
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Very nicely done!
I love poems about love and yours was refreshing and original. You express things in your own way (and your way is good!).
Maureen
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This is a very good poem that you have penned here well done dear poet
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this flows very well, i like the use of north,south, east, west. reminds me of mother nature in all her glory.
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indeed, there is such a strength shown here, the passion of love - to a womand - has so much more import than to the counter-gender. a power and force that transcends all.
blessings and best wishes, ~richard 
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"She is a woman
A woman in love, can't you see?
Even the God's can't hold;
A woman in love,
For the songs of love is all she hears."
what a powerful piece of poetry. really
beautiful and strong. and yet tender and
sweet.
You did a marvelous job on this piece,
it is very touching and sad and joyous,
all at the same time.
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thank you so much for your comment and am so glad that you loved this piece and enjoyed it i try to keep up to keep that joy flowing.
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Very Powerful Piece
I really love the title to this piece. I like how you embody the strength of love of your subject here. Especially in this stanza:
What joy is this, that horse's can't hold
Even in trumpet blown for war,
As I gaze the god's;
trying to hold her still,
Yet louder the melody sounds
Your use of words and imagery captures the mind. You see things differently as you paint with these words. Very good piece. Keep up the good work.
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VERY NICE
This is a very good poem for women.We love strong and true.When we are in love thats almost all we think about.Great write
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Thank you so much I love your poems too good heart for nature
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Nice, very nice. The strength of the passion comes through really well. Well structured, easy to read but demanding at the same time. One thing. Feeled isn't a word, and felt would get the right rhyme you seem to be aiming towards. Same with heard. However, you probably meant to do this and i'm probably being stupid. I like the metaphors, the greek/roman undertones and the general vocabulary though. Really nice piece of writing.
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Thank you so much you have spoken well am glad you did went through this
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