As I lay here on the cold hard floor,
I wonder if its worth it.
These drugs I take to hide the past,
Leave me tired and physically drained.
Its okay when i am still stoned,
I really couldnt care.
but when i come back down,
I have to start again.
To feel this pain, and endure the shame,
Of what my life has become.
I see the past flicker through my mind,
And feel the pain anew.
Author notes
Option 6
In a list
A contest entry
- Option Upon Options Contest by SensualWhispers.
525 points, ended January 19, 2007, 14 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - The beauty of pain. by Jai Guru Deva.
700 points, ended August 6, 2007, 81 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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And by the way, since you're one of the only ones to choose the picture option in my contest, the picture is of me. It was taken by a friend. There's a story behind that...but I just thought if you were interested, you'd like to know.
Just ask.
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Amazing.
I love it.
Such evident pain and suffering, but the joy and escape that comes from an addiction can be just what one needs to free themselves.
I believe a release is all one needs to recover from some things.
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Thank you for your contest submission. LOL sneaky pete, lil sis!! using this previous inspiration and pic, hehe, no worries it's still fine and i still like this one, lmao. Best of luck in this and all of your endeavors.
Hetohke'e * (canna do the applause, they r still there from last time ROF)
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such intense and realistic picture you have painted here lil sis, one of my fav pics too!! I do ahve to say that 4 might flow better if it was just a tad shorter, to match the rest of the short lines, otherwise well done in a simple form that is perfect for emphasis in this piece!!
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Not sure I like the free write of this. Sorry am much more partial to rhyme. But thanks for entering.
moment liver -
Very deep poem.
................Interesting view on the poem. I thank you for writing something like this. It means a lot for someone to show the bad affects of drugs. You've done a great job on this poem.
I really liked the ending:
Its okay when i am still stoned,
I really couldnt care.
but when i come back down,
I have to start again.
To feel this pain, and endure the shame,
Of what my life has become.
I see the past flicker through my mind,
And feel the pain anew.
Very good.. Thank you for entering this into the contest and good luck to you, for you've made the finalist list. Kassie. -
the sad part about drugs, well on of them is when you get off them, this is a golden poem and i think you have done a great job keep it flowing and good luck in the contest
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SO TRUE
Your words hit hard and deep,
of the many ways we choose to ease the pain of life,
drug abuse is the deadliest
i comment anyone who can be strong enough to fight this demon and stand tall,
powerful and brave write!
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It is hard to recover form drug abuse
Sometimes we realize we have failed. When we get there we fall...and fall hard. Drugs causing us to fall. It takes its toll. You do have to work hard to recover. Addiction is never easy to over come.
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