Cold and alone, lost in myself
Reliving this pain that will not heal.
Standing in the rain, the tears flow freely
As the final betrayal bleeds.
The last nail in the coffin, buried to the hilt
As the stars, frigid and wishless, fall from Heaven.
You know I would have fought the angels, love.
But you torture me, dear one, with your indifference.
And it makes me sick, when I think of you now
And all of the times that you promised me forever.
How long did you lie to me, love, and why
Do you feel the need to cut me this way?
You know that I would have died for you, love
Though you wanted me dead, more than anything else.
You tried to make my life a living Hell, my angel
So that I would have no choice but to walk away?
So then, you could blame it all on me, love
And walk away, leaving me with the pain.
But who am I to hold you back, dear one
When I am no longer of any significance to you?
We are always drawn to that which hurts
As I am to you now, and ever will be.
I pray for you, love, all day and all night
And that I may find a quick recovery.
But this damaged soul is too far gone, frozen forever
Wondering if God can hear me at all.
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Option 1
I recently ended a year-long relationship with my ex because of the way he was treating me. And as if the pain weren't enough, Fate drove another nail in the coffin and made him start dating my roommate, whom I love like a sister. The final blow has been dealt, but she knows that I don't blame her. Besides, it's likely just to get a reaction from me anyway.
As I said in the poem as well, we are always drawn to that which hurts. I know that a part of me still loves him, and I doubt that it will ever end. I just have to trust that God had a reason for taking him away from me.
Inspired by the song, "Lacrymosa" by Evanescence.
http://artists.letssingit.com/evanescence-lyrics-lacrymosa-x3pkc8z
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I have felt the same way before... it touches me very much. well done!
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Trust me in this situation I know exactly how you feel. I like the couplets together, you speak a lot of personal experience and it's brave to do so. Similar thing happened to my sister, her ex after about a month [though she didn't know it at the time] started dating one of her best mates who happened to used to have dated one of her ex's friends, it was really messed up.
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Very lovely. Mentally relaxing as I read this. Very lyrical, however lacks in rhyming. Not all lyrics have to be songs however that is what I mainly looking for in this contest. However every thought is taken differently. Overall, this is rather debatable in my judging process. But ultimately this is a decent peice of work thus effort. Thank you for entering.
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There's truth and pain in these lines. We do tend to keep pain as a companion...why, I won't try to guess.
This fits well with the themes provided...I would ask for the option # though just to keep the entries straight; it helps. Thank-you for this entry; I felt it is well-written and expressive. Blue -
I have been in your situation before.Dating a man who I thought loved me with all of himself,when he woke up one day and became a totally different person. I broke up with him,wrote about him in the poem "It does not feel this bad.....or does it?" My love came back,but am holding back a lot.Because though he is almost himself again, i can't trust him like I did for fear of being hurt again.
I think we all know what love can do to us ladies.
Your poem is so heartfelt and I really feel you.
Comparing it to death is just the ultimate thing
But always remember,there's a light at the end of the tunnel. Never underestimate yourself.
For me, if am hurt, I know something or someone is going to touch me in a very different and magical way.
Back to the poem,maybe you should try another background, It does not really bring out the poem that well. I mean, Its all sombre, but it lacks something.
Otherwise, you are amazing
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hi there. i am so sorry to hear of your situation and i hope that your pain subsides and you find happiness again. my situation is slightly different. he does not hate me and i dont him. we are the best of friends now and we are awaiting together as friends for the time to come that we can be together properly. he has never hurt me intentionally and he thinks the world of me. he would do anything for me as i would him. i hope that both our situations get sorted out and bring us more happiness in this year. god we have started a new year and we are starting it with all this hurt, it just isn't right. i enjoyed your write it was full of broken emotions and your tear stained words pierced my heart. good luck and god blessx
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