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Four Seasons (Tercet)

It has to be spring
yellow forsythia blooms
red red robins sing

It must be summer
t-shirt clinging , sweat on brow
wow what a bummer

yes it is the fall
red and gold leaves on the trees
best picture of all

Feeling winter's woes
it really is cold out there
frozen nose and toes
   

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Prompt.Seasons

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  • Little Blue Bird
    October 27
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    Nice

    Thank you for entering and good luck in the contest.


  • Heva Feva
    October 10

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    This is so cool! I really like this bit:
    "It must be summer
    t-shirt clinging , sweat on brow
    wow what a bummer"


    Thank you so much for entering my contest, I love your poem! Good luck...
    -heva

  • trekkergirls bank
    June 8

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    Very good. I like this one. Thanks for sharing this with us and thanks for entering this into my contest. I like the way you use few words yet you choose those words well to describe the seasons. Good job.


  • tarcus
    June 21, 2008

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    best picthre of all
    wow what a bummer

    I use your own words.
    Perhaps others who comment may like to re-read the word
    "picthre" and tell me what it means, then kick themselves for not affording you the decency to point out that one small mistake can destroy the imagery you try to portray.
    (or perhaps I am the one who can't spell)
    Then again I am no great lover of haiku.

  • soccer220
    November 5, 2007

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    Great job! Your syllables are perfect- I counted them out! I really like how you write a haiku for each season.. and each one seems to rhyme! The descriptions are great! Thanks so much for entering and good luck!


  • Namita
    January 8, 2007

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    http://www.deviantart.com/deviation/37713602/?&q=missing+you.&qh=boost%3Apopular+age_sigma%3A24h+age_scale%3A5

    Suits the poem.
    Try it out.
    It will really match
    Later.

    Luv,
    Candy


  • suseann
    January 6, 2007

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    Hi! Bill. I'm somewhat flattered NoJo thinks my sonneteering s]is skilled. Sorry to say,there's more I don't know than know about it. Co hosting a traditional sonnet contest currently with masterblaster. Who is light years ahead of me on the subject. I fear she'll be saddled with the judging for the most part.I only know the basics of a 14 lined Shakespear type myself. Even then I slip into my own rhyme skip type. Not so traditional,except I tell everyone it's my own new versioned sonnet. Ha! And actually,it is. Even if I'm the only one useing it. So,I'm not going to be much help on this.Yet,she is somewhat correct in that if you were to add 1 additional alternated rhymed line to each verse. With a rhymed couplet at the end.You could have a sonnet I'm used to seeing. But,I'm flattered as all get out she thinks I know much about sonnets. Di/Masterblaster and or MargretG. are two real genuine experts on the topic.Sorry to not be of more informed help.I liked your Haiku chain too. Well done! I lost my beat I'm afraid on the last two lines in mine. Yours is smoother in my opinion for what it's worth.~~Suseann

  • dillpickle62
    January 5, 2007
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    Summer's Sweat

    feeling winter's woes/to/ toes. I'm right there with you. Wonderful job here, colors of fall red and gold, summer heat and blooming forsythia's. My what a wonderful picture you've entered.

    Thank-you for sharing with us in this contest.


  • NoWayJo
    January 5, 2007

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    I was hoping you'd make an entry, Bill! The lady to whom I dedicated this contest loves nature-themed poetry, especially sonnets. I left word with her that although I didn't have any expertise to judge sonnets, maybe someone--(thinking YOU) would submit an A-B-A rhyming haiku--AND HERE YOU ARE! I hope you don't mind, but I'm gonna pass her a link to this entry of yours--I know it'll make her day!

    And even by reading these series of haiku, it's to know Spring and Fall are your favorite seasons! By the way, if your winter is too cold out there, y'all gotta come here to the Northeast. I'm in Jersey, and temperatures are expected to break records in the 70's tomorrow. I figure it's a great time to be heading down to the shore!!!

    Thanks for this great entry to the contest, and I'll be passing Suseann a link to this post with your permission, OK?

    Jo

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