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Jump of that cliff

Silence does not reappear
Vague voices scream
They'll never understand
They'll never see

Staring down into the sea
Searching for that single sign


"Keep on dreaming," you spoke
"The key is to never see," you thought

 

I'll mourn forever

for I have nothing left

Nothing left to lose

Nothing, but your spells

 

Blurred my senses

Never I'll have to speak again

Silently trapped in the spiders little web

 

"I've made you blind," you victorized

but I never heard you

 

I'm willing to surrender

Giving up for you

Vague sounds give place for a gasp

my final devine silence

 

Their faces filled with deteste

as I see the final sign

The madness of your spell

has casted me in vein

 

"But maybe you were too weak for my game." 

Author notes

Not based on true things.. Inspired by the good songs of Stream of Passion, a band about with I found out only a couple of weeks ago!

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  • Wolf Mistress silver member
    March 4, 2007

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    Just great.......

    I loved your way of setting this up...

    And your closing line is the best to be....

    But maybe you were too weak for my game....

    You were in control all the time
    I loved it although I don't know the band nor the songs made by them..
    If I have time I will prob go listen to them some day soon..
    Keep on penning,
    XXJUeannette


  • lucy sky-diamond
    January 27, 2007

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    a really, really great poem, i love how youve put in part of speech, and weved it into your poem. a really well written poem, keep up the great work


  • individuality gold member
    January 26, 2007

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    a good piece, nice flow and atmosphere presented. spill a gin and tonic and twist it into a double whiskey while in love...