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Walk Away

 

graceful she walks through lonely feilds

as the wind tosses about her hair of honey

yet peirces her heart of stone

she is an island, alone and forgotten

with only the stars as companions

and serene waves before her

yet, her world is glorious

no troubles arise

and nothing compares

to the tastes of this land

she is content as one

imagine that.... 

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can you just imagine? what a sweet escape...

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  • ShatteredSilverStar
    January 6, 2007
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    thanks to everyone who has commented on my poem...

  • luvdrkchocolate
    January 6, 2007

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    Wow. This is a pretty cool piece that you have here. I like it. I thought the picture did look like something out of a magazine. But I thought that your poem was a much better example. I thought it had lots of depth and interesting with the way the images were persented. It was the last line that I thought was the best one!

  • amandamoomoo
    January 6, 2007

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    I love this poem, it has such an earthy feel to it. It creates a great imagery for me with a deeper meaning.


  • illusions
    January 6, 2007

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    lovely images this creates for the reader; however, these images could be strengthened by retooling them - ie: "as the wind tosses about her hair of honey/yet peirces her heart of stone" might be stronger and more consise if you say something like "as the wind tosses her honey hair/pierces her heart of stone".  i think this could be done in a few places to put more power into your voice.  i like what you have so far!

     

     


  • rhondasail
    January 6, 2007

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    Being free to discover one's own beauty and power. Heady stuff. Very well written. Nothing can compare to the knowledge of self. I like the ending here...imagine that... like calling everyone who reads this to "walk away" to this "glorious" place. Excellent.! I'm already on my way!


  • freespirit51
    January 6, 2007
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    You have penned this beautifully. Your images and flow were great as well. You have penned a winner for sure. For one to be truly happy and content they must be happy and content within themselves first. This you have brought out in poetic verse..Excellenly done.


  • Abdul T Alishtari
    January 5, 2007

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    Why I added this to my list

    You came so far
    from being young, reactionary
    as other break jars
    of your best confectionaries.

    You have grown up
    and spread your wings
    now your words sup
    upon feelings which sing.

    Abdul Tawala Ibn Ali Alishtari

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