The worst thing in life
Is knowing that you’ve failed
Knowing that the battle is lost
See your dreams shatter to pieces
All I want now is escape
Escape from the sadness that holds my heart
From the memories that still haunt my sleep
From the madness that destroys my mind
More and more I search for a place
Where reality cannot find me
Where I can cry in solitude
Where finally I can be free
A place where time doesn’t exist
Closed off from the rest of the world
And as I sit there, alone but finally at peace
I wonder time and time again what to do
Looking up to the stars above
Wanting to shout out of bare desperation
Wiping yet another tear from my eye
Facing it, I have only one way out
Having a dream doesn’t make you a smart man
Knowing it won’t come true
That does
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I love this. Failure is so hard to deal with especailly life failures. Since I just left you I think the longest damn comment AP has ever had I will make this short even though this write was incredable!
Looking up to the stars above
Wanting to shout out of bare desperation
Wiping yet another tear from my eye
Facing it, I have only one way out
I cant help but smile at this because of a recent experience of mine where I actually did shout at the stars and wiped a million tears from my eyes. Thats a whole other story but this caught me by surprise. Failure.
Greatjob!
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Thought Provoking!!!!!!!!!!!
This is a deep and sad write!!! I feel that way sometimes about just wanting out of this life, but only sometimes. I know God has a plan for all of our lives and when we are not in tune to that and the world lets us down, we sink deeper and deeper into darkness! It makes me really sad to think you are this sad. I am not trying to push God on anybody but he will not let you down. You have this wonderful gift of expression and you may use that in a way that could help others by reading your works and that I feel might give you more self worth because you are making a difference in others lives. i know that others are touched by reading the works of all poetry poets because I have read many including this write that has touched me in alot of different ways. But If you would try praying to God wit all of your heart seek his face and he will make himself known to you and this world will no longer matter in that he'll shopw you heaven, sheer heaven and put new words in your heart to write, a new song to sing and all this darkness will be just a bad dream, you can use in telling others how he brought you through the darkest day to the lightest one!!!I hope I didn't sound preachy, but I'm alittle older now and I can remember when not having a boyfriend or not fitting in this world's system was the end of the world to me. Anyway keep your chin up and give God a try, what do you have to lose?Thanks for sharing, you are a great writer!!!!!!Toni
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I've been praying to god... For nothing special really, just to look in the mirror and see a happy face. But he never answered. He never gave a shit about me. No, my friend, God can't help me out of this...
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Haunting, Sullen Masterpiece
If only it was that easy to be "smart".
And it is a tragedy, but when you lose such a conflict you become a prisoner of war, and sadly there truely is no escape...
anyhell, a great write from the clutches of such a bleak muse.
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2nd stanza in this is outstanding, very rich words, the end of this is tinged with sadness, I think I don't want to meet a smart man then if dreams don't come true! Beautiful piece.
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Poignant Message
And yet, i cannot help but to disagree with your final line... knowing a dream won't come true does not nessecarily make him smart, unless he abandons a TRULY hopeless dream... a very smart man replaces it with a better one, the alternative is hopelessness, and that, my sad friend, is what this appears to be... so please please find a new dream, be it small or big, just DON'T GIVE UP !!!! -
how true is your ending
pretty cool write
kept my attention
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the title is misspelled no d on worsed in the first line. other than that i liked the state of being your expressing here. The frustration with the world. Feeling as if you have no direction and all those around you simply detract from your purpose.. whatever that may be
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Most of the time I'm one of the people who tries to make you smile again or I'm the one who tries to make you look at it in a different way, but I know the feeling you had in this poem, probably not for the same reasons but the feeling stays the same...
remember life is war, and there will be many battles, but I guess you've heard this one before : when you've lost a battle doesn't mean you've lost the war...
hope to see you very soon !!!
miss you
xXx your little sister xXx
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Good
It was good. Very descriptive and detailed, but it was a little too dark for me. If I was in a dark mood right now it would be perfect, but I'm not. Good write. Thanks for sharing -
Great write. I especially loved the second and third stanzas, which I unfortunately understood very well. I know that feeling so well, on a very deep level, and I believe that that's some of the reason why I do the things I do, including, but not limited to cutting and drugs. I also loved the last three lines. I know really well how it feels to have a dream and know on a very primal level that it will never come true. It's a sad feeling that I know all too well. This was an all around sad yet beautiful write, and I'm really glad I had a chance to read it. Great job, Keep up the AMAZING work.
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no words can describe what feeling I got from this poem. it is a great write. I'm realy sorry for you!
grts
Lynn
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All the things I said before, I could say again...
but I won't, I know where you stand and how we can't change that.
Greetz
PS: great poem though, maybe you should do something with your witing skill
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I'm gonna be honest with you... I leterally burst into tears when reading this... Although the reason may be different, you have just descrbed the way I've been feeling all week... Sry, I'm gonna say the rest in Dutch, too hard to find English words.. Ik ben echt in ne put aant zakke... En ik weet perfect wa ge bedoelt me 'weten da de strijd verloren is'... En weten da den droome ni uitkomt...
I know I'm usually the first one to whine about rhyme and rhythm, but not this time... Your poem is touching enough to make me want to cry yet again...
Keep on writing, you're doing a heck of a job...
grtz...
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