Sword held high, dressed in black
Lies hold face with truth pushed back
Fighting off your many foes
What lies in your heart no one knows
Leaving all questions behind
The distrusting answers you must find
Slashing, killing those in your way
Lost outlook as you do what you may
Seeking why your life fills with pain
You journey far, not seen from again
The ones you left behind, back here
Wait for your return, with fear
You've traveled lands of fire and death
Killing men with warm, hurt breath
Lost yourself along the way
Owing the night and ruling the day
Strong you've made your outside grow
For your inside pain you will not show
From the mountain in life you take your piece
So killing can be your release
Your heart won't let your mind decide
How to love, and not to hide
To feel the warmth of caring touch
The hurt is too strong, the pain too much
You continue slaying men
As I sit here awaiting when
You'll return, your heart, mind strong
Surpassing all the times gone wrong
But as of now you stand there tough
As life keeps telling you, “not enough”
Sword withdrawn, hits of fury you exchange
You won't come back until things change
Author notes
Option #2 Picture #5
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Hate and Lies
A contest entry
- Contest: Poetic Motley of Choices by BrokenFiend.
497 points, ended January 21, 2007, 19 entries
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Honorable mention
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Comments
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Very nice piece. It is hard to get away from the assasin in your life. Excellent rhyme. Good luck in the contest!
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Violence as an outlet to escape personal pain. Interesting concept. Nice story, thanks for the entry!
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This related to me a bit too much.
And this was very interesting to read.
I liked the fact that you just
made it a poem that told a story.
Good write.
Liked it.
..Simply Me♥
Lost yourself along the way
(specially that part got me)
and the one about not showing the pain inside.
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This poem was well written as well as interesting. It was a good read. Thank you so much for entering and best of luck to you in my contest.
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Thank you for entering my contest and good luck. This is a well written poem that tells the story of fighting men across history. You tell it well. it almost seems that you may have experienced this yourself or at least someone very close to you has gone though it.
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Interesting and very...well-formed. A good poem with a great punch in it. I really enjoyed the depth of it, and the time you clearly put into it all. Thank you for entering, and good luck in my contest.
BrokenFiend -
Weird, but interessing. I liked how you used two different topics and theme. My favourite part would have to be the 6th paragragh. It seems like my life right now. Good luck and thank you for entering.
Chloe. -
wowsers
very long and excellently done,
very imagery and intriguing, makes for a good novel idea eh . Really great poem, I love how you can't tell if he's a hero or a villain, all you know is he's the main guy in the poem. 
excellent write and keep up the good work.
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