My fearless friend,
Closest companion,
Condemning comrade
My ruthless razor,
I ask you why?
You take away the pain,
The sorrow,
The heartbreak.
You take away my confusion
You are safe and you release me from this torture I call my life
But yet I am bound by your chains.
You give me everything it is I crave
You erase the wounds this world has placed upon me
But you replace them with your own.
Why I ask? Why?
From my wrist you help me release
All that’s built up inside of me,
You give me control when all else is spiraling away from me
But you leave me with a constant reminder
A scar,
telling me im losing
Showing me im struggling and falling
Reminding me of how I’ve failed.
And even when I cry for you to release me from this life
to bleed me dry
to release me from my own destruction and the destruction of those around me
Even when I beg and scream and plead for you to end it for me …
You will not.
You leave me here, with a constant reminder that I
need you
despite how much I try to be strong.
So why my faithful friend I ask
Why do you do this? How do keep me coming back?
Again and again
Even when I lock you away and place you in the darkest shadow I can find
I am forever bound by your chains
And the freedom
you
grant ...
Author notes
Tres - Depression
A contest entry
- Razzor's Bliss, Painful Secrets and Fearful Screams(A Dark Contest With Many Options!!!!) by XXBrunettexBarbieXX.
375 points, ended January 22, 2007, 34 entries
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Well.
This is so very true. The razor has us at it's beck&call, and we want to be there. But why?
This describes the struggle perfectly.
In a sense, I enjoyed reading this.
You did an excellent job.
One thing you need to check is the second line of the last stanza. I might be reading it wrong, but something seems off.
Thanks for entering! -
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I can relate. It's control where it can be found no where else. This portrays the feelings, the addiction, the control, the pure agony, of being a cutter. I love the last four lines
I am forever bound by your chains, and the freedom you grant.
Simply Amazin -
holy shit
that was amazing how you made the razor come to life how you made it real te use of words the flow and imagery it was purely amazing i loved it i do mean it it was awesome it had a speal of sadness and hoeartache the pain was felt it was real it related to so many so well it was awesome as hell all was brillant
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Intense
Great poem. It speaks to me. You think that a rzor will help you and keep thing under control, when really it makes things worse. A lot worse. Things may seem under control for a while, but then they spiral even more out of control. Very powerful and sad. Great write.
~Nirvana -
dark, true, and relateable
this is a wonderfuly writ poem it is full with detail, vivid descriptions, heartbreaking emotion and it is very very relatable keep up the good work
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Great Write!
I can totally relate to this write. It was great. I love how you wrote a letter to your razzor. I am a cutter and can relate to this poem so much. It's such a struggle but such a sweet release. Anyways this poem had a great flow and I absolutely loved it. I could feel your pain and emotion. You are very talented. Keep writting. Its such a great way to release feeling.s Thank for entering my contest and good luck
~Chrissy~
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This is so true, razors are evil like that. Its hard to stop once you start and the scars are with you forever, no matter what. A constant reminder of our mistakes. Great job and good luck in the contest.
jan
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OMG! This poem is amazing! You capture the feelings and depression so well! Amazing!!!!!
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once again flipin awsome! i couldn't have said it better myself. grrrrrreat poem. very dark and emotional like i like it.
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