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The Hydra Slayer Elf

One day a hydra was loosed

and elves had been seduced

The hydra, a terrible serpent

his demeanor ever so ferment

 

Heads six had he

and terrified me

seven inch fangs

and spittle that hangs

 

Truly a darkened day

when elves could not go play

The dark elves had trained them to kill

they laughed for it gave them a thrill

 

So I took up my sword and ran for the cave

trying to be, an elf that was brave

I swung my blade and off with a head

then I kept swinging until he was dead

 

So home I returned to my peers

basking in elfin cheers

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 27

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    That is really good, and you came along and saved the day I love it! You put a lot of thought into it. It was a pleasure to read.


  • Blue Rew silver member
    August 11, 2007

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    I can see this tale being told to a group of children in the moors somewhere. You give it a lighter side with the rhyme and the playing denied. And you also put bravery in, so it is very appealing. In this line
    "The dark elves had trained them to kill"...
    did you mean him instead of them as relating to the elves taught the hydra to kill? Wonderful little tale. Blue


  • Manoura xx
    January 24, 2007
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    weoooo weooo...i donno how to wistle...haha...great job...once again..and again...and again... i think that ferment works fine...but that is just my opinion...but ya...actually RedAquarius is kind of right...you could make it better...but still it is great...


  • RedAquarius
    January 6, 2007
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    Cutesy. Not sure "ferment" works for me though or why the elves would be seduced that he was loosed. Still cute story once I got past that.


    • Amera gold member
      January 6, 2007
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      I was wondering if it would bother someone. The term isn't just used in chemistry it also means: "social unrest" a state of agitation or turbulent change or development; "the political ferment produced a new leadership";


  • Cannonsfire
    January 6, 2007
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    Great visions of the beast played in my mind and the thought of elves giving it a fearful beating, just delightful simplicity in your words which works well.


  • KingSorrows
    January 5, 2007
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    cool

    I liked it, simple and fun. The tale of and elven hero, one of my favorites.
    favorite lines.
    Truly a darkened day
    when elves could not go play
    The dark elves had trained them to kill
    they laughed for it gave them a thrill

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