I see us walkin’ down the street
Hand in hand we walk
Laughing about the times we’ve had
Soul to soul we talk
But then the next moment
You are gone
Fast as a blink
And you were gone
(chorus)
Why does my mind
play tricks on me
Making me believe in
What will never be
And why does the heart
have to be so cruel
Finally I realize
That I’m my own fool
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Just another dream it was
A dream of laughter and of love
Love that’s false and that never was
But love is still what I dream of
My love is trapped inside my heart
It has nowhere to go
No one to cling to, no one to hold
When it’ll be set free, I don’t know
(chorus)
Oh how much I wish
To be held in your arms
Feeling so warm and secure
Safe and free from harm
I go to look into your eyes
Deep and wild as the sea
Only to see a reflection
That is not me
It seems like there is no love for me
But I need someone to come set me free
(chorus x2)
Finally I realize that I’m my own fool
Author notes
(c) Ashlee Nix
A contest entry
- **Blue Eyes and Secret Smiles by madgirlslovesong.
525 points, ended May 29, 2007, 18 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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First of all, I'd like to thank you for entering my first contest. Secondly, it's eerie how closely I can relate to this! It reminds me of a few things I have written! Very well done!
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thank you for entering! I loved it! you did an amamzing job! I truely enjoyed it! good luck in the contest!
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i liked this overall. it was a good idea, original, sad, but sometimes true, and well written. i could see this as a song. i enjoyed this read, especially the part:
And why does the heart
have to be so cruel
Finally I realize
That I’m my own fool
awesome job, and thanks for entering!
x from the ashes x
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this is very good...i love how yuo added that your mind plays tircks...it's a very common and cliche line and yet at the same time it is very relatable....I thought that this was a very good read
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I think we are often left feeling like we are our own fool, as we don't see the behaviour of others quick enough, in the most part and cant predict what they do. We feel we should know what to do and it's sad really, but sometimes we just have to realise things happen and it's not our fault that we couldn't see them or prevent them.
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where is the chorus?
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i love it. this is exactly what i feel i just wrote a poem similer its on my page if u want to read it. but go read the rules and change accordingly thanks
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sorry bout that! fixed**
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Great write!!
My favorite lines were:
Just another dream it was
A dream of laughter and of love
Love that’s false and that never was
But love is still what I dream of.
idk, i just really identify with them. as well as the piece as a whole. great work!
thanks for enetering!
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We all are fools ~ This is a GREAT write!
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nice poem. nice song. very creative. thank you for entering.
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This definately does have a nice lyrical quality to it. It flows easily, the words and the ideas, they carry out throught it rather well. This felt like something one would say to themself after the end. Just quietly, sadly.. realizing what they never did before. A beautiful piece, thanks for taking the time to enter it and best of luck.
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This is a really great write! You really have a lot of talent! keep up the great work!
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I like the chorus and most of the poem it really flows especially nearer to the beginning. In the middle i kind of lose the flow but all in all a good write.
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Wow. I love this alot!!!!!! Don't know how it would sound as a song but I do love it as a poem. Great write! Thanks so much for entering!!!!
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