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A lunatic is in my head

Forgive the intrusion

of these deceitful lies

filling her head with

outrageous disillusions

 

I have come to

a conclusion

to stop all this

confusion

 

A decision must be made

as to how the facts

can be swayed

to do my bidding and

make up this silly girls mind

 

To forget her head

and jump off the bed

to fall to her death

by his side

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  • poetryality silver member
    February 24, 2007

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    Sometimes I wish there was a mechanism that would allow even the most insane to recognize a lie for what it is worth, and that is nothing. The tragedy is when one mentally ill person is not apt to know that devious thoughts and actions can cause another's demise. An excellent portrayal of a "confused and delusional" mind.



  • grannyeri gold member
    February 7, 2007

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    Mental illness is not an easy thing for others to cope with, let alone the person who has it. In today's society there is not the stigma attached to this that htere used to be years ago, but one still has to take medication regularly to keep on an even keel. Unusual topic to write about...

  • SmartLilsinger08
    January 11, 2007

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    It's always better to listen to your heart when it comes to liking someone.

    This poem is really sweet. I've been there where you like someone alot. But your conscience is telling you don't do it that it won't work out. But hey everything is worth trying right?


    • Little Feather Greeters member
      January 11, 2007
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      Interesting

      I find it intriguing that that is what you got out of this poem. As I intended it to be about the insanity caused by extreme abuse. It just goes to show that everyone has a unique interpretation.

  • rhondasail
    January 8, 2007

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    This speaks to me of finding one's own power and wielding it with strength to"do my bidding". Not living from a reaction point, but choosing to be proactive and true to self. I like the title, it's almost humorous, considering the text, but so many of us have a "Lunatic in our head", so it isn't far from truth. Is the last line or two a metaphor for choosing to give up the power to another, as in marriage or relationship, or falling in love, or suicide? Just curious. Well done..again.


  • Morningstar1948 gold member
    January 6, 2007

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    As before you are a great writter

    I felt as if you was talking about yourslef when you was young. But then on the other hand i felt you writing about someone else. Either way this was a great write for one to read/


  • Sagergirl
    January 4, 2007

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    Great job with this poem. I think I got a different message out of this than what you intended, but I guess that's the beauty of poetry. The reader sees what they want to see. I have a terrible time making up my mind, though I sense that this poem was deeper than what I see on the surface.


  • Hekate gold member
    January 4, 2007

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    Awww this was so deep and powerful..I loved the flow to it. I think that all of us have felt this way actually at some point in life.....even if we don't want to admit it..

    Kamala Kari
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