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Desperate Monologue

 (pic. Passion-Peter Meade)

 

Hello? Anyone/anything there?-
(she desperately searches for something in her soul)
I know there is something, but…come on, come out!
(heart beats faster, breathes anxiously)
come on love, be brave for once
(starts crying and screaming as much as she can)
Come on God damn it!
…………………………….
(silence..starts singing and cuddling his picture)
I loooove a guy, his naaame is …
(stops singing!)
Aghhh, If…
If he knew that I love him.
He should know,
That’s what I scream every night before going to sleep
“I loooveeeee yooouu”- like a hungry wolf
Aghh, if….
If there’d be a single ounce of courage in me
I wouldn’t think twice, I would show him
Carelessly whisper in his ear
Those vagabond words that awake waterfalls of emotions
And he would tell me the same
And we would then take each other’s hand
And then leave the hand-holding,
And get to the french kissing
The passionate touching
the explosion of the emotions
the trembling of the feelings
the fusion of the bodies
the……………………!!!

I wish dreams would become realities
And the reality a dream, for once.
(walks away)

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  • Raelin
    January 6, 2007

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    A beautiful yet sad piece. Great imagery and flow. Well done. Keep them coming. Good luck and Blessed be.


  • u took my user name
    January 6, 2007

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    let's start with how much i love the image, shall we? lol.
    "Those vagabond words that awake waterfalls of emotions" i really like that one

    the repetition of "and" works well, and the would's... as she thinks about what would happen. :-P It makes it personal, like the person is really talking to herself

    I really enjoyed this one. you did a fine job. a pleasure to read.
    Best wishes,
    AlbaSoul


  • Twilight Masquerade
    January 6, 2007

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    This is a very emotional feeling piece. I can almost see it as a musical in my own mind. Great job with this, keep it up!
    ~Snowfall


  • -Death-s Punchline-
    January 5, 2007

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    sounds familiar ^.^;

    Gosh this sounds like me on a bad day... Great job on this one, loved it. Good luck in the contest.

    jan


  • Timothy Cameron gold member
    January 5, 2007

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    You know you can honor these feelings...the passion is obviously deep and consuming you. If you stay silent, you know the cost to your body and soul. What good is a song without music?


    • Stella Cadente
      January 5, 2007
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      thank you for your comment.You know, this is supposed to be fiction...but it's half truth.

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