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Polyacrostic Palimpsest - Testing Times For Sonnet Rhymes - What Enterprise !

 

 Kindly refer to Notes on Polyacrostic Palimpsests 

 

 

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Palimpsest : A manuscript on which more than one text is written with earlier writing, or one level of meaning, partially visible.

For further examples see the link to Polyacrostic list below. 

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The text appears three times here :

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I : plain text - in black
II: text in blue + 'test' internal acrostics highlighted

II A: Text as above without spacing.
III: Complete acrostic palimpsests .

Text III has been reformatted to show letter progression hidden in Text I. Punctuation, spacing, are absent, to highlight palimpsest phrases invisible in the first and second versions. Also the minor test acrostics are not taken into account here for the sake of clarity to enhance understanding... Enjoy !

 

n.b. adjoining letters (vertical, horizontal, diagonal)

spell TEST over 35 times ... Enjoy ! Wink

 

 

 

 

Testing Times For Sonnet Rhymes - What Enterprise !

 

 

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Open instincts ! Writ theme test who'll see ?

Pressed, the mesh inset in style hides, shy.
Efforts knit span lines to link as I -
Not on trite end - top levels mask, text free.
Your summons seeks, a bubbly threaded key
On to straight end true, whose inner cry
Uses the prose, its music just, to tie.
Reread, prime the brain, gold runes there be
Haste. All nets art, stands meter ready,  -
Ever here rests precious.  Test apply
A hidden cue where a verse pitch reply
Renders truth's initials to train thee.
Take these echos, guest, yet peruse them well,
Sharp telescopes help set score, context spell.

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Testing Times For Sonnet Rhymes

              II

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Open instincts ! Writ theme test who'll see ? 

Pressed, the mesh inset in style hides, shy.

Efforts knit span lines to link as I -

Not on trite end - top levels mask, text free.

Your summons seeks, a bubbly threaded key

On to straight end true, whose inner cry

Uses the prose, its music just, to tie.

Reread, prime the brain, gold runes there be

Haste. All nets art, stands meter ready,  -

Ever here rests precious.  Test apply

A hidden cue where a verse pitch reply

Renders truth's initials to train thee.

Take these echos, guest, yet peruse them well,

Sharp telescopes help set score, context spell.

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Testing Times for Sonnet Rhymes II A

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OpeninstinctsWritthemetestwhollsee ? 

Pressedthemeshinsetinstylehidesshy.

EffortsknitspanlinestolinkasI

Notontriteendtoplevelsmasktextfree.

Yoursummonsseeksabubblythreadedkey

Ontostraightendtruewhoseinnercry

Usestheproseitsmusicjusttotie.

Rereadprimethebraingoldrunestherebe

HasteAllnetsartstandsmeterready,

EverhererestspreciousTestapply

Ahiddencuewhereaversepitchreply

Renderstruthsinitialstotrainthee.

Taketheseechosguestyetperusethemwell,

Sharptelescopeshelpsetscorecontextspell.    

  

             III

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What Enterprise !

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What Enterprise
Open your hearts and happiness will become true
Or foster new hopes, giving joy anew

 

 

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Openinstinctswritthemetestwhollsee

Pressedthemeshinsetinstylehidesshy

EffortsknitspanlinestolinkasI

Notontriteendtoplevelsmasktextfree

Yoursummonsseeksabubblythreadedkey

Ontostraightendtruewhoseinnercry

Usestheproseitsmusicjusttotie

Rereadprimethebraingoldrunestherebe

Hasteallnetsartstandsmeterready

Everhererestsprecioustestapply

Ahiddencuewhereaversepitchreply

Renderstruthsinitialstotrainthee

Taketheseechosguestyetperusethemwell

Sharptelescopeshelpsetscorecontextspell

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© Jonathan Robin polyacrostic sonnet written 25 May 2005 and 14 July 2006

 

Author notes

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Mural Palimpsest http://www.flickr.com/photos/albedo/106879061/

Other poetical experiments - Enjoy !

http://allpoetry.com/list/16178-Polycrostics-Palimpsests-and-Poetical-Experiments


See below Edgar Allan Poe

Taking
1 st letter of 1st line
2 nd letter of 2nd line
3 rd letter of 3rd line

etc only 1 diagonal which reads SARAH ANNA LEWIS

"Seldom we find," says Solomon Don Dunce,
"Half an idea in the profoundest sonnet.
Through all the flimsy things we see at once
As easily as through a Naples bonnet —
Trash of all trash! — how can a lady don it ?
Yet heavier far than your Petrarchan stuff—
Owl-downy nonsense that the faintest puff
Twirls into trunk-paper the while you con it."
And, veritably, Sol is right enough.
The general Petrarchanities are arrant
Bubbles — ephemeral and so transparent —
But this is, now, — you may depend upon it —
Stable, opaque, immortal — all by dint
Of the dear names that lie concealed within 't.


Elizabethan examples also exist of internal and double diagonal acrostics

 

 

Our Life is Hid with Christ in God

My words and thoughts do both express this notion,

That Life hath with the sun a double motion.

The first Is straight, and our diurnal friend,

The other Hid and doth obliquely bend.

One life is wrapped In flesh, and tends to earth:

The other winds towards Him, whose happy birth

Taught me to live here so, That still one eye

Should aim and shoot at that which Is on high:

Quitting with daily labour all My pleasure,

To gain at harvest an eternal Treasure.

 

 

Colossians 3:3

 

HERBERT George 1593_1632

http://www.georgeherbert.org.uk/Docs/The%20Writer.pdf

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  • Beautiful-N-Broken gold member
    1 day ago
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    Sorry hun, but this is a little too extensive for me and my brain just can't comprehend it at the moment. I will bookmark it and come back to it when I can. Sorry again, but thanks for entering.

  • ecrivain01
    1 day ago
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    Interesting format ...

    the colored ones are unreadable, but the black and white works fine. It appears that a lot of work went into this.

    Congratulations on the trophies. Thanks for entering and Happy Holidays.


  • KnightOfTheRose gold member
    October 13

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    Ah, very nice job on this. Thank you for taking the time to enter. Excellent work and the best of luck to you in my contest. Congrats on the trophies



    -Steve-


  • sinfull
    September 15

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    why am I not surprised

    I should by now know to expect to find something amazing when I follow your links. I've only just discovered the sonnet form (yes!) and here now you say they have all these little hidden agendas!... I must learn more. This would be ...wow...what a challenge!


  • Demington
    September 7

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    Your work makes me think of a scientist who loves poetry. You have definitely cooked up some crazy stuff in your lab. I will read this again to get a better feel for it, but I have to say, I am impressed.


  • Dryad Enya
    August 21

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    I'm confussed by the layout and it just deducts from the poetry, Edgar Allen is a supreme poet but I can't find the reflection of his work here, perhaps i'm dizzy with the thought of my date tonight or it is the actualy layout and such I don't know. Try to just focus on one main thing and not add everything all at once.

    Best of luck anyway
    Gorecki


    • Jonathan ROBIN
      August 21
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      Poe Sonnet Diagonal

      Take first letter of first line, second letter of second line etc....Sarah ...>


  • kerrypn
    August 15

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    This really is extremely clever, it has taken me a good deal of time to understand the poem in its entirety-very masterfully done indeed. I love how you have combined several forms, each brilliant within their own right, but combined, they create something astonishing, cryptic and beautiful. One of your best I think. Well written and best of luck in the contest.


  • kylierenea
    August 15

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    This is definitely something to be admired! This must have taken forever to do! You obviously have a lot of patience and a large vocabulary.
    Although I have to wonder about your ability to read rules (your username)
    Good luck in your other contests as well.


  • poisonivystar4
    July 27
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    I won't deny that it's very clever and amusing, but I don't think it fits in with my contest.


  • pine-needles
    July 21

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    wow! this is amazing! such an intricate, complex form and a masterfully woven poem. i am extremely impressed! just a regular sonnet without all the acrostic stuff is challenging enough for me.

    to be completely honest, i am usually put off by modern poems written in an archaic style, and that talk about themselves, so it was hard for me to see beyond these things and appreciate the poem, but i am absolutely in awe of the work and genius rhat went into not only using but inventing this form!

    you reveal many of the things going on in this poem with thorough explanations. all i ask is that you quickly summarize the requirements of the form at the end. thank you so much for your brilliant entry!


  • GotLilt
    June 6
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    Very interesting. A bit hard to read, but good!


  • PaperWingsCrumple
    May 29
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    i cant say i have ever quite seen a poem like this before must of taken awhile nice read


  • Little Eagle Greeters member
    February 25
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    Thank you for your entry

    It is obvious that you put a lot of work into this. With detailed descriptions, unfortunately I do not see the patterns that you have described and though I have read this many times I just don't get it .

    Perhaps it is too much text and the description would have been better off placed in notes. As it is, I am uncertain what is actually the poem and what is not. Though what I believe is the actual sonnet fufills all of the requirements of the form, I get nothing from it. This was more a demonstration of a form than an actual poem.

    I encourage you to keep writing to read and comment.

    God bless
    Tammy

    • Jonathan ROBIN
      February 25
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      Testing Times

      One would respectfully suggest that you scroll down
      Version I shows the sonnet text
      Version II highlights test letters in the text
      Version II A removes the spacing so as to make the test inclusions apparent
      Version III highlights the different acrostics excluding those 30 inclusions of text juxtapositions

      Enjoy !


  • Kirs
    December 24, 2008

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    Intense

    Such lengths and tedious discourse to create such a profound and noble product. Very interesting indeed and I'm glad to have been a part of this.
    Thank you.
    ♥.


  • aboomer silver member
    December 14, 2008

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    wow - this was very interesting!
    Congrats on your well-deserved trophy, too!

    best wishes in the contest


  • theredcatjazzoflove gold member
    October 22, 2008

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    cool is this some new style crapwhere have i been this is new to me but i like it hon you set a writing trend


  • Olivias Violin
    October 17, 2008
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    Wow!

  • dogpooper
    September 27, 2008

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    What enterprise!

    How did you do that?Do you have a brain that automatically thinks in terms of puzzles and crosswords?That enterprise poem is a winner.

  • dogpooper
    September 26, 2008
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    Here is three

    I'll give you more feedback later.


  • nevadapoet
    August 17, 2008
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    WOW...I still don't know if I understand it all...definately worth another read.
    Nevadapoet


  • misshugglebugglez
    August 16, 2008

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    I lllllllloooooooooovvvvvvvvvveeeeeeedddddddddd it!

    wow! this is very creative!!!!!!! definitely going on the finalist list! Great form, very unique. Excellent vocab, reminds me of shakespeare! =D Best wishes!
    I love ya!
    -pb fudge


  • Terry-too silver member
    June 25, 2008

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    Outstanding

    I spent almost an hour in here in a rolling fog of amazement at the prodigious intellect capable of such a feat!

    Only with help did I find hints how it might be done. MargaretG mentioned graph paper, and like a breeze blowing, ideas cleared. Preparing the location of words to be hidden is not the only problem, it will be finding words to include the letters within them, or to fit smoothly between the selected letters--after spaces have evaporated.

    Even just to make sense at all would be astounding, let alone to have almost miraculously recognizable poetic form!

    It should be begun as a child, to give it time to improve with time and effort. To re-align the synapses to operate automatically the way that we automatically spell, or speak another language riding piggy-back as French, Italian, and Spanish do.

    For me to get a sonnet with these constricted conditions would only be possible with the hearty cooperation of my lifelong companion, Muse.
    Muse writes my best poems, which type themselves, readymade. We have been writing verse for close to seventy years. Ornery critter that Muse is, I promise no results within the next five years or so. Fifteen?

    I have a pad of graph paper here. Although I have serious doubts, maybe before I use the final sheet, we will have a haiku, or more unlikely, a quatrain in iambic tetrameter!

    Sure beats SUDOKU!

    Terry


  • albymyheart gold member
    June 20, 2008

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    I had seen a concrete poem within an acrostic before and that amazed me, but I have never seen this palimpsest idea before. I love mucking around with words too, but see I am at the very bottom of a steep incline. You appear very healthy and at the top!..alby


  • fakeport
    June 5, 2008
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    That was incredibly impressive. I can't really say anything else, except well done, and thanks for your entry.


  • rainbow bi trinity
    May 21, 2008

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    wow can you like seriously teach me i think you are like very skillful in these for,ms you have presented before us best wishes to you in the contest

  • Rainbow Eater
    May 17, 2008

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    awesome! I'm never heard of this before. I might try it sometime. Thanks for teaching me something new about poetry! I find it a little mind boggling that you could do all three things at once; write a coherent poem, put the words enterprise, and spell test nmerous times. How long did it take you to write this? Did you learn this in a class?


  • Sprite silver member
    May 4, 2008
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    You did an amazingly good job on the parameters of this form of poetry! Quite complex and requires strict attention to details. I am not so sure that you have given me a poem on a subject that has never been written, though.

    However, that said, I cannot fault anything else about this poem. Brilliant.
    Thanks for entering. ~ Joyce


  • m...c
    May 2, 2008
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    Awsome job. Love it.


  • broken-colours
    April 19, 2008

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    That is far too complicated for my wee little brain to process! I mean, I understand that you've used a complex form, which I applaud you for, but deciphering all the notes.. woah. Anyway, the poem was interesting enough, but, because you were trying to follow so many rules and have so many hidden things in there, it took away from some of the emotion of the piece.

    Thanks for entering and good luck to you!

  • PeterGrimley
    April 18, 2008

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    I find these things to be very clever word games, but too rarely worth the effort. More at home in a book of puzzles than with poetry, a pity I have read and enjoyed much of your work.


  • Kevin Moderators member
    April 18, 2008

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    i don't get it I can't find the 'test' words? The hilighted lines don't seem to make any words?


  • Melissa Burns
    April 18, 2008
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    Thank you for your unusual entry into my little contest. Good luck with everything


  • Kp.s
    April 17, 2008

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    Wow, from experience I know how difficult it is to write a poem while under the 'pressure' of a task like this. You did very well, not only did you complete your task, but your poem was quite enjoyable too. Thanks for sharing, great work,
    KP


  • isabelwk
    April 17, 2008

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    woo hoo

    This is new to me, but quite a challenge as well for me to work out. Is it supposed to read like a treasure hunt? I give you kudos.


  • NeonRose
    April 17, 2008
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    Here they are....

  • NeonRose
    April 17, 2008

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    Okay..I have a violent headache now...just kidding! This is totally amazing. You must belong to Mensa or something. Way beyond anything I would even want to attempt! (reference aforementioned headache) Too bad, I can only give you three cheering, grinning guys...deserves more..maybe I'll just add some, without a comment.


  • Poesing
    April 17, 2008
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    That had to take some time! Wow - very interesting. Never saw such a poem as this. Blessings.


  • Darianna
    April 17, 2008

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    That is way beyond anything I could ever attempt...ever! It's more like a puzzle than a poem...yet you weave the poem around it as well...my goodness...are you a poet God or something? I'm so much in awe that my awe is awed!!! I'm so I can't even say anything intelligent cause...well look at that...

    Wow...


  • Triami Arack
    April 17, 2008

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    Wow, so many different poems put into one! I'm astounded by such character, and skill, and so many other things that I'm flabbergasted! This was a very great read, keep it up and don't stop, you could change the world with your pen!


  • Griswold gold member
    April 16, 2008

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    OH my lord, I have a hard enough time just writing a PLAIN ol' sonnet, not to mention all the crossword stuff you got going on in there. That would take me hours..lol Best of luck on this, I HAD to click this just to see what it was!!!!...Scott


  • Violent Serenity
    April 16, 2008

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    wow that was great! i love this alot its what i was looking for lol ... well really great work here... keep it up good luck in the contest! ^.^


  • ears2hearyou gold member
    April 9, 2008

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    That was amazing....

    i think i just heard the crack of my brain, bleeding
    atop my cranal, in fascination and pain,
    metaphors thrown out the window,
    scattered as sacrifical lambs,
    tempting me to offer blessings,
    undo all the elements of restrictions,
    native to my homeland,
    nesting tenderly,
    evolving powerfully,
    dedicated to releasing me from freewrite hell!

    stunned!



  • only1love4ever
    April 1, 2008

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    oh wow, that was so awesome. It took me a moment to understand, but I finally got it. That was so clever, by the way, and it defiently surprised me...:]


  • Melodies
    December 10, 2007

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    Ker plunk! I fainted!

    Oh, Jonathan ROBIN, you are the most delightful man whose mind can go deep into things and burst out with fireworks of amazing brilliance. I think that if we were to have a contest for only this form, the entries would be very simple and even so, would be difficult to compose.


  • Poetic-Theorem silver member
    December 6, 2007

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    Speechless!!!!!!!!!!

    Jonathan Robin,
    Thanks for sharing this masterpiece.
    All I can say is Bravo Sir, you have accomplished a task that is breathtaking.
    I'm in awe at this tallent
    Wish you the best in the contest!
    Many blessings,
    Happy Holidays,
    ~David~


  • islekine gold member
    December 6, 2007

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    My heavens!

    What a project! I can't believe you ....well, yes I can.
    Best wishes in the contest!
    Write on...and on...
    *PEACE ON EARTH*


  • Room without doors gold member
    January 7, 2007

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    Outstanding

    The poem reads as a stream of conciousness and the messages are cleverly included. I personally prefer flow and poetic content in the poetry I read. I do applaud the achievement of this poem however as it is written with so much skill and is not something that is easy to achieve. This poem delights in acroustics and is a wonderful intellectual challenge.


  • CarolDesjarlais silver member
    January 6, 2007

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    Ok, now I know you are a genius....not only a genius but a member of the Mensa Society.....and so far above me in logical thought that I am beyond passing any test of yours.....
    Simply amazing and mind boggling....truly....you are such a kind mind boggler though, to ahve patience with my stuttering simplicity of style.


  • MargaretG
    January 5, 2007
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    And that is only in the plain sonnet - line O.

  • MargaretG
    January 5, 2007
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    impressive

    I like your hidden message a bit more than the frothy icing. I would never have found it without assistance, I could only attempt writing one on graph paper. This is a puzzler's delight, but a sonneteer has one reservation.


  • ShaShay
    January 4, 2007

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    I'm dumb

    You should know if anyone had a problem understanding this it would be me. I'm copying it to study it though. Thanks for making me keep working and maybe awakening my muse.

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