Carl
Fear seeped into my heart
I see now the girl my hopes had destroyed.
I never wanted to see her like this
She was my baby girl.
My darling lies before me
Her cold waxy skin and empty eyes will haunt my memory.
My hero, my baby, the only one who could save me
I could not save her.
Sarah
She never ran away,
Always had the answers.
She was my best friend,
My only saving grace.
When I could turn to no other,
She always held my hand.
Seeing her here, cold, alone, in a box...
Nothing will ever be the same.
Jimmy
She picked on me a lot
But she hugged me and kissed me more.
She stuck up for me, and said only she could pick on me
What happens when Charlie pulls my hair now?
Derek
Our future was set,
She was my darling.
I wish I could have been there for her.
Without her, I don't know how to continue living,
She was my savior.
How can my hero be gone?
The only one who could save me?
Believe me, though you can not hear me,
I will not let him get away with this.
He will not hurt my darling and live.
His fate will be worse than yours.
Erica
My hero cannot fail.
How is she gone?
How can my first baby be gone?
Author notes
This is about a girl who is murdered, and the people who her death affects.
option 3
A contest entry
- When Superheroes Fail by Night Phoenix.
875 points, ended February 25, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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WOW
You know you right some people never know how many people one persons life affects. this here is great words and work. It shows alot of meaning. Keep the pen moving
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This makes me think of how many people are affected by one simple task, or one's simple choice.
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Wow I really, really enjoyed this one! A great take on the option, I must say.
Amber's said everything!
Well, thank you for entering and best of luck!
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Fascinating choice for this option! Well, not so much fascinating, but intriguing, certainly.
"Her cold waxy skin and empty eyes will haunt my memory."
Eerie! I don't understand how people can look at the bodies... it would give me nightmares.
Sarah's portion is very powerful!
Derek's is more powerful than Sarah's, though. Wow. Astounding! He obviously loved her more than life itself, especially if he's willing to kill her murderer with no thought to his own well-being.
Erica's was a good choice for the last stanza. It's brevity works very well in a conclusion.
I like how you've not stated what the relationships were - save for Sarah's. You expressed the separate individuals so well that such an introduction is not necessary.
Nicely done!
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Thank you for your comment
I have no idea why I wrote this like I did, but I like it now that I go back and read it.
Sarah was the girl's best friend -
"She was my best friend,
My only saving grace."
;-)
I will never understand how people can look at dead bodies, either. I don't even like the idea of funerals.
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