New cuts, curls and gleam.
Breath blown sax, soft hair
a musical breeze.
Mother, a beauty rare.
Professing his love of thee.
A rocking heart full of poetry.
Between Mother Muse, musical host,
and poet, a book.
"All The Scents Of Summer"
is written for the love of she.
"Mother Muse of Music"
New cuts, curls and gleam.
Two beautiful girls in a poetic
eyes life, yes their poets life.
A rocking heart of poetry...
Author notes
I borrowed the "Poetry Rocks" in this pc. for the contest holder. Hope you like it. This is a living poem.
For the book: All The Sense of Summer
A contest entry
- Make My Heart Melt by madgirlslovesong.
345 points, ended January 13, 2007, 31 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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excellent expression
Your first stanza really draws the reader in. All 3 lines are amazing. The hair, the sax, the breeze...all very creative images and thoughts.
Jeannette
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Wow..a rocking heart of poetry.. and a book I wait to be able to get! Merry Christmas man of ocean waves!
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where is the book?
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where are you?
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Haven't read any of yours for a while so I thought I'd treat myself, and I'm so glad I did. I loved the imagery and metaphor you use in this, anything connected with music is always going to impress and I did like the way you achieved cohesion here with the opening and penultimate stanzas. The mood in this is just (and I hate to use this word because I only use it to describe himself normally) beautiful! Thanks for sharing, must read more of you again regularly. Cheers.
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NED! Gah! I need to get ahold of you pronto! oh noes! I hope you get this really really soon!!!!!
By the way, MAD crazy poem. I love it. -
No I don't like it... I LOVE IT! It read so softly and easily just love this write! Awsome
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nice
i like it.
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ah haha Ned I saw one line and thought of your two girlfriends. I bet I am right. Because I'm just really good like that. =D
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Wow
Thank-you all for your wonderful insights and comments.
I can only hope Mon Muse will see the truth to real love that goes into this book. And i need her. Thanks again all. -
Absolute Delight
Love the poem that is a gently breeze caressing my heart & soul with the beauty of words you've penned so well... love the ending - a rocking heart of poetry... such an amazing way to describing true beauty of Poetry Rocks making the book of All the Sense of Summer a living legend... very well crafted masterpiece... thanks for sharing your talent... take care Minoo -
great write! i loved that gentle flow, that kinda passion it has in it..
"Mother, a beauty rare.
Professing his love of thee.
A rocking heart full of poetry."
those lines were amazing,
"a rocking heart full of poetry", amazing image
~rana~
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This is beautiful! I love it!
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Definatly Rockin'
I'd have to say that the first line really catches my eye alot, its 'tasty' if you may...And I LOVE the 'rocking heart of poetry' I think your choice of words and expressions rules. NIIIIICEEEE...
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This is wonderful, you defiently make a heart melt. Keep them coming. God bless you my friend in all that you do.
Tabitha -
Lyrical
Soft melodious poem that flows like a stream of gentle river with the freshness of himalayan waterfalls.. very nicely written poetry that crystal clearly shows your talent... Thanks for sharing such a wonderful masterpiece... take care Minoo
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a good piece here, just one section that needs slight attention - poets life should be poet's life as life is belonging to their poet, you. i gather this is your book then.
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Wowowowow!
I reeeeeeallllly like this one! I also like how everytime I read something of yours, there's a difference in the flow or rhyme scheme, but they all are so good! Sorry I haven't commented for a while...I get lazy about commenting. I have read some though, and kudos on all
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This rocks...
I can only agree with the other comments here...it would work out great as a song
Just call those musicains and let it rock
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awesome
write..I too agree this would be awesome as a song...
it has a good flow and tempo to it..
Great job!
God bless, Brenda
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i do like this! the new cuts, curl and gleam reminds me of a haircut... hehe.. my favorite line is the last one, "a rocking heart of poetry". it was an excellent end to a lovely poem!
good work!
p.s. a rocking heart of poetry would make a good title for a poem.. don't you think?
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Yes it would -Have a go of it
Ha haha yes a very good title, You can have it since I borrowed the idea of use from you. I am glad you liked the poem. Good luck with your contest. I hope you have many interesting enteries. Dill-
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i agree, get the banjo out and give us a song lol spill ink and twist me into the crazy shape of love...
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Thanks indi
Perhaps I will try this in a song. I have 3 accidental songs I wrote as poems that I sing now. In the woods where nobody can laugh at me but the chipmonks.
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I think this would make a good song good luck in the contest
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Thanks, I'll work on it.
I know some musicains maybe I'll try it. hahaha thanks
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