She stands, silently, in the darkness
Across the room from her former love.
Her heart is breaking; Tears well up
In her ineffably sad, glassy eyes.
Dear God, what has he done to her
To turn her into this soulless abyss?
A dead star, devoid of emotion
Bitter and blind to all.
The passion in her voice is gone
Her soul, faded with the rest of her.
A mechanical diva, all that remains
Is this heart, full of black and cold as ice.
She longs to leave this part of her life behind
But still, she wallows in her misery.
Her tunnel, she says, is dark and empty
When the light at the end is nowhere in sight.
She crumbles to the ground
As the pain overtakes her impenetrable guard.
The days become years as she sits alone
For only in her imagination can she love.
And on this day, when the pain is just too great.
The music turned up loud, she tries to think
And so she pours her heart through her eyes
Sits down, and begins to write.
Each of her words portray the sheer magnitude
Of the anguish which her love has caused.
Painting pictures of despair and hopelessness
And of paying the price for following her heart.
For he lied about life, he lied about love
And stole the very essence of her soul.
So she seeks solace in her art, her lifeblood
The one part of her soul that she knows is real.
So she takes the hit, refusing to fall
And through it all, she knows she'll survive.
For though her soul is weak with fear
An incredible inner strength remains
Undaunted.
In her haunted eyes.
Author notes
Option 3/4
"These wounds won't seem to heal, this pain is just too real. There's just too much that time cannot erase." --Amy Lee
"It still feels as though the scars will never heal, although, as the poem says, I did find comfort in my writing, music, and art. It helped to release the emotions, as well as all those things that I'll never say. I also realized that there is a price to pay for listening to your heart. He caused me so much pain, but I know that, even if I never love again, I'll make it through this in the end because I am strong... Steady as she goes!"
This was me, almost a year ago, and I still can't believe that it was possible to feel so dead inside, so lost, pathetic, and unloved... But I wrote this poem because, even in the depths of my depression, I knew that there was hope, and that I would survive. This was written during a very dark time in my life, and it is my only one from that time with a message of hope. May it serve as a light for all of you, in the darkest places, when all other lights have gone out.
In a list
A contest entry
- Open Wounds by Eugene Cash Hensley.
700 points, ended November 26, 2007, 19 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Hope in hopelessness by faithwhisperer.
675 points, ended January 24, 2008, 4 entries
Bronze trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Dead Inside by XxSuicidal-LovexX.
1500 points, ended August 9, 2008, 43 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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Excellent. Emotional and reflective in a dark manner, but in the end, i like taht the hope is there. a bit dark for hope, yet the end makes the whole poem meaning flip around and approach a new direction. Great job!
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Such imagery, such darkness, such inner pain. By god i love this. Overflowing with emotion in each stanza. This is so excellent. I've never read anything this amazing before. Thanks so much for entering my contest.
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I am in this dark place, as we speak. It feels as if this wall around my heart is padlocked forever for fear of ever giving it so willingly and selflessly again......to be who I was before him and yet who I am now? Scares the hell out of me. Thanks for the glimmer of hope.
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Congrats on your Bronze winner. Dark painful hues. a struggle within. Hopelessness, inner turmoil, a sense of loss of self....
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I really liked the idea of you writing to relieve your pain and feel hope! That is exactly how I feel also, so I could really relate! Thanks for entering!
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Congratulations! I love the way you captured the inner strength even through the darkest, dankest times. As I read this piece, I feel a hopelessness welling within me that dissipates into an inner resolve. I pray, though, that the haunting will leave your eyes... that you will be whole and restored completely. Thank you for entering my contest...
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I really liked the strength and hope in the ending lines of your poem. It shows that even when things look darkest, we have to have faith that the light still exists...somewhere. I'm also glad to see this was written a while back, and that you are doing much better now? Healing can take an incredibly long time, but I'd say you're well on your way. And sometimes, it's only after we've healed that we are ready for the "right" one to come along.
Thank you for your entry in the contest, and good luck to you!
Best wishes,
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Thanks
Thanks for entering my contest. This was a very emotional poem touched me and my grandpa deeply. We feel your heart. But this poem is so sad and I asked for a poem that was give Christians hope and renews their faith and I feel that this does not does that. Sorry. I loved the poem but sorry. I hope to see you the next time I do a contest. Keep up the great work.
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wow, this really deep. I'm guessing that this is option 2 in the contest. I really like this one it was really deep and I could tell that you really put your heart and soul into this one. Thank you for entering, and good luck!
Alex -
Thank you so much for sharing this with me!!! reading this was like looking into a mirror. The words seemed to Flow Not only with my eyes, but with my very soul. Like a current amongst water...all flowing the same way.
I do believe I have a new favorite poem!
Thank you so much!!
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pain is palpable
pain is tangible
you know what pain is, you have obviously felt it
but you know you can transcend it
you just know you can, -
WOW amazing
What a way to vent such a terrible hurt.The writer can always turn to the pen for a little relief.With such powerful words you gain some sort of control over the hurt.This is just a fabulous dark write.The emotions flow from every word painting a strong picture of brokenness.
My Favorite Lines were:
And on this day, when the pain is just too great.
The music turned up loud, she tries to think
And so she pours her heart through her eyes
Sits down, and begins to write.
Sometime the only way to remove the hurt is to write about it,and you have done a wonderful job in that.
God Bless
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WOW, I can truely say you poured your heart out, and that's a defent plus to all that goes in this contest. Your words were strong and told such an incredible story.
To say in a few words this is a very strong and a bold thing to do. Sometimes it's a very hard to state how you truely feel when you're heart is so bad on the inside.
Great job, good luck in the contest!!
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I can so relate to this poem and I hope you feel better and don't become jaded. Thanx for your comment.
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even though i don't know you, i'm proud that you have decided to go on. so many stop when the pain starts. it was a sad poem, but you offered a bit of hope at the end. cling to that hope. you'll make it through.
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