Chess, it is the battle-field of the mind.
Looking on it one would surely find,
Peices of varying rank and skill,
Moving only at their Master's Will.
Pieces are taken, points are scored,
Nothing could stop the advancing Horde.
Both Bishops fell,
As did both Knights, though they rode well.
Then the Queen's died facing eachother,
As pawn and pawn slew one another.
And at last it was all pell-mell,
as everyone fought, and everyone fell.
And at long last, it was but two kings,
Who fought eachother with mighty swings.
After a lengthy duel they saw,
In the end, it was inevitably a draw.
A contest entry
- Give me your best ! by vasi.
700 points, ended March 10, 2007, 123 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Pre Write Contest by SensualWhispers.
615 points, ended March 15, 2007, 100 entries
Honorable mention
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If I can't win, you can't either!
I've had that experience before with the game. I used to play my brother often enough... Try, though, nightmare chess sometime.
Anyway, your meter could use some work, but the rhyme was fine and dandy. I rather enjoyed it and it deserved better than an honerable mention in the pre-write contest.
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This is...
.... great. Now I know why chess is called the bloody game. It's almost as if it was a real life war. You've done a wonderful job. Thank you so much for entering the contest and the best of luck to you. Kassie -
Tragedy
Chess is a game of tragedy as you have put it .
I can't play chess well so I am glad you can. Good poem. Kahy
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Awsome
Chess is one of the few games of pure skill, same with poetry, and you have real talent here, Ive been in the works of creating a chess poem, and even had it as an option for my level 3 contest that i havn't posted yet, but for the poem i just havn't quite got my ending so i havn't finished it yet, but yours is excellent, very well thought out and the ending was fantastic. Great job!!! - Jacen an IndividualEleven.
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Thank you everyone! This poem and grim defeat kinda go together because i wrote both of them during a game of chess which I lost. So I modified this ending and wrote grim defeat after. THANK YOU FOR COMMENTS!
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Finally I find a rhyming poem that does not make me cringe!! For that you get my applause, because I usually hate rhyming.
Nice write, it really is.
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cool
What an interesting take on a game of chess. I don't think I will ever look at a chess board the same again. Is this taking a little inspiration from 'wizards chess'? It's a really cool write. Good job bro!
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LOL you have no idea how often that seems to happen to me when I play checkers or chess so it gave me a good laugh. I like how you used such descriptive words about a simple game of chess. Good imagery and very creative, however it didn't make me laugh for that long so I don't know abou the lasting impact. Flow was pretty good and it wasn't really metaphorical but I meant for descriptive vocab to go in that category also. Just so I don't have to send your score later here it is.
A game of Chess 81/100 - I think thats best so far.
Creativity: 20/20
Imagery: 18/20
Flow: 17/20
Metaphor etc. 11/15
Lasting Impact 15/25
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