Where have you gone my love?
And when will you return to me?
It has been a lifetime since last we were together.
Walking alone beneath a starless sky
The voices call out from the shadows
And endless Darkness shrouds my soul.
The demons of my mind know the truth.
You have left this place, never to return
I am alone, lost and forgotten in this void.
This world is cold and black without your light.
What has become of you since you went away?
I long to be back in your arms, feeling your warmth.
Night after night, I search for you my love.
Without any hope that you will be found.
An angel of the night has carried you away.
I cannot stand living without you by my side.
I long to throw off the chains that bind here.
My soul cries out for the sweet surrender of death.
I will continue my search until the end of my days
No matter that you have long since escaped this hell.
This is my quest, my unwanted saving grace, my curse.
A contest entry
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very emotional write. It's dark and seems heartfelt. very nice and thanks so much for the entry.
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I like the concept of "Unwanted Saving Grace"...That could mean so many things and you've done wonderful and imagistic things with it...Awesome!!!
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I can picture this
I'm a very visual person and this really spoke to me. I can feel a sense of longing and pain because of a lost love. This poem radiates a shattered heart that won't give up. Lovely, simply lovely.
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Well this is definitely different. I like the beat and the rhythm of it. The title was really strong. Really drug me in. Keep up the good work.
Love always,
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Thanx, I actually started with the title and wrote the poem to match. Glad you liked it
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awwwwwwwwwwwwwwww i lyk it vry gdxxxxxxxxx
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Really good. You've got some real talent. Keep writing. I can't wait to read some more.
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Thank you so much!
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This was a really good poem, the word choice is great, i love line 18 "my soul cries out.." its eerie and cool. and the capitalization of "Darkness" also gave it a cool touch, like the dark is an actual entity.
The only criticism i have is that for some reason it just seems repetitive to me. Like..I know it says different things in each stanza, it just seems that the poem doesnt' go anywhere. It's just like 'searching in the dark..searching in the dark..searching in the dark'...u know?
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Thanks for the critique, I appreciate it. This was something that just sorta happened while listening to an Evanescence song. Part of the repetitiveness was intentional because that is how the narrator feels, stuck in this never-ending loop that she can't get out of. Part of it was because I did like NO editing, lol. Thanx for the comment!!
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Ha! I knew it was Evanescence-like. lol, and no problem
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