moon bathed silked skin
draped in fabric so sheer
eyes so bold and daring
pulling me
pulling me
to take soft hip into warm palm
gently remove
loose
articles
hands slide
down
smooth
flesh
her scent mesmerizing
smell of explicit desire
heat filling her
body
growing
aflame
lips
meet
soft
passionate
kisses
as tears
cascade
down
her
face
hand slides
down
perfect
curve
looping
around
small
swell
of
belly
between
crease
of
legs
pushing
two
fingers
into
her
laying her on her back
down by cold stones
a water fountain to join the noise of our moans
sweet
once
innocent
fruit
now
given
to
me
beneath
cold
moon
long legs
bending
stretching
wrapping around
me
holding me
so close
so tight not letting go
as i slide in and out
sweet netar filled hole
beautiful face lays before me
soft eyes ruby lips
taking
nipple
into
mouth
sliding up neck with sweet kisses
and
back
down
again
as hand slides up neck and under ear
carressing her head, hair strands between fingers
i cup her warm cheeks in my hands
leaving prints of love across her belly
I
go
further
down
into soft patch
small hairs
tickling face
sweet romantic mixtures
sliding down my tongue
Moons
whisper
Silent
calls...
body
trembling
beneath
me
with uncontrolled fervor
pulling
me
inwards
sucking
me
wholly
we made a symphony
of
hard
breathing
hearts
thumping
her eyes grow wide
then
shut
so
tight
as body tightens around me
we get
entangled
in
our
long
hair
faces
sweating
heat
grinding
tension
released
we
lay
there
silently
as
hearts
continue
to
beat.
Author notes
Just kiss me once!!!!!!!!!!!
weird eh? just was in the mood to do somthing diff from my usual...hope ya like!
BTW the pic i used is here...http://i82.photobucket.com/albums/j272/m1ss_w1ck3d/Luis%20Royo/luis_royo_p2_022.jpg
A contest entry
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Reason your poem wasn't put in the finals: The format of this was very distracting. I'm really sorry.
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no worries. Thanks for reading it though
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HOLY FUCK!!!!
HOLY FUCK!!!!!!!!! i want to fuck my boyfreind like, intensly, violently, fiercly, rapidly, swiftly, immediatly!!!! -
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thx appreciate it...HAVE A FUN ONE
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Hm...
I found myself kind of divided about this one because of the format.
Although I don't use very creative formats in my poems, I love it when someone can and pull it off, which you did in places like-
"hands slide
down
smooth
flesh"
But, I found that just because this one is fairly long, the format also makes it harder to read, and though it's okay for something 20-30 lines, at the 236 line mark it gets a little tedious. And for erotica if you can't focus on the poem, there's no way the reader can get into the emotion of it.
Just something to think about. The poem itself is really good, you just have to read it a few times to understand it. -
love the lay out you used and the story is hot. But the ass on the girl in the picture you mentioned is fandamtastic!! great work the Satyr
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ty ty ty
glad that you enjoyed...kinda weird mood is what brought to the weird layout lol
much respect..
BI
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Different, yes...
But still just as wonderful. You're very talented and I'm glad whenever I see something new from you
~Sith
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ur too kickass u know that
LOVE YA GIRLY!!!!!!!
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Me? Kickass? I might kick a few asses but it's nothing special
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lol u kick my ass
now thats special ^^
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This is an awsomely vivid write full of passion, the sensual feeling portrayed within its content was very moving...in other words warming aswqell as hot.Well done tessarah you have given us a very sensual piece of erotica here.
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aww thanks tiger...^^ glad that u liked what becomes of my boredom..
much luv
BI
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WOOOH
Babe woooh just wow i loved it...it was woooh just intense yeah? & that picture was HOT! lol. but my point was this poem just i ono its kinda wierd how all the typing is going different ways but i still like it it kinda gives it a shape & form of the way the lovers feelings & hormones are going...entagled...i dont know i love it!!!! i totally want me & my love to do this...this is hot!!!!!!!!
xox
love ya
ceci
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glad that you enjoyed i was bored is all lol
luve ya girly!
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haha yeah right u were booooored psssh spank my ass & call me mickey (mouse) my bfs nuts are green! lol love u. this write was very sensual & i loved it & theres nothing u can do to stop me lol!
xxx
ceci
xxx
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Wow i loved that poem!!! I wish i could right that kind of poem, but i just cant describe it.
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lol just happened bc i was bored
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This was very interesting. I liked the uniqueness of it. It was fun to read.
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thanks dearly for the comment
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