As I close my eyes
and drift far away,
my mind can wander
somewhere to play.
I can be anyone
I’ve ever wanted,
and being different
won’t get me taunted.
I’ll swim with mermaids
in the deep blue seas,
frolic with dolphins
and surf on my knees.
Sail like a pirate to
Gilligan’s lagoon.
Fly on a rocket
and walk on the moon.
Visit the land of
sugar plum faeries.
I’ll be the lady
Prince Charming marries.
Every night after
my bedtime prayer,
I will turn into
a dragon slayer.
Riding magic carpets,
wrestling a T-Rex,
with wizards casting
a sorcerer’s hex.
I’ll be the flutist
who charms cobra snakes;
a ballerina
who dances Swan Lake.
A performer on
a circus trapeze,
swinging and flying
through the air with ease.
I can be anyone
I’ve ever wanted
and being different
won’t get me taunted.
As I close my eyes
and drift far away,
my mind can wander
off somewhere to play.
Where things may not be
just as they may seem.
You see, this is only
my sleeping mind’s dream.
Author notes
This is written from the perspective of a lonely and ridiculed little girl, who lives her happiest moments in a dream world.
Photo by LuneBleu at www.Deviantart.com
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A contest entry
- Let your imagination run free (picture contest) by Seeking Peace.
450 points, ended January 16, 2007, 34 entries
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Hood-Winked!
Lori, I love these lines "I can be anyone
I’ve ever wanted
and being different
won’t get me taunted." We should be able to be who we want to be and who we are no matter what. I love your write so full of amazing imagery and emotions. What a beautiful dream.
You have just been Hood-Winked
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Nice flow to this poem..the wording was awsome you are very skilled at writing poetry..I love the picture in this too also I love the backgroung...good luck in this contest
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Very pretty Great rythm. Really enjoyed reading this. It was just so gentle and true. Good luck :
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SO BEAUTIFUL!!!!!!!!!!
Oh my Lori, this is a very different out look on this! One that is so lovely and gives one a wonderful sense of being in a dream.
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Kevin, if only we could retrieve the innocence of childhood dreams! Thanks so much for reading and your wonderful comment!
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DEAR LORI
I do know what you mean my friend, we can only try to keep those values and dreams alive within our hearts.
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This is definity something that I could've related to when I was younger. I liked the rhyming because I flowed so well with everything else and tied it more into the meaning behind the poem. I felt that the eighth and sixth stanza's didn't quite flow as nicely as the others did. Very uplifting in a way, though it was a somewhat sad poem. ^_^
Hell Angel
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Thanks hellangel for another wonderful comment from you! It's much appreciated! I know a couple of the lines didn't flow as good as others. I wasn't really too concerned with perfecting the flow, just getting across the feeling. Thanks again for reading this piece.
~Lori
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Loved this write Lori, it is awesome. Our dreams are escapes from the reality of the world, where you can be anyone you want to be. I think we all relish those escapes in our lives from time to time and to those who are taunted and abused those dreams are even more important. Excellent rhymes and descriptions. Thanks for sharing.
Love ya,
CK
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Thanks big bro for your wonderful comment! It means alot to me! Love ya
~Lori
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Yes I see the beauty in the imagination of a child, tis a wonderful perspective to write from.. well done
Thanks for entering thic contest, I wish you the very best of luck
Karen
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Thanks for the lovely comment, Poetic Whisper! It's much appreciated! To write through the eyes of a child is truly a joy.
~Lori
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Very Good
I see my dream whisperer has paid you a visit! This was very good Missy. I think you had a wonderful flow and rhythm to the piece, flowed sweetly and told a great story! Very Good ~Tia
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Tia, you're so good for my ego! Thank you for your lovely comment on this write! I'm pleased that you enjoyed it. I haven't written much over the holidays because the kids have kept me so busy. I've got a bunch of words flowing out today! LOL
Take care
~Lori
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The flow ... Perfection, The imagery... Vivid, The story... Captivating, Emotions... Intense. I loved this piece hun, one of the best I have read from you I think. I could relate at one or two times in my life so it is also a heartpiercing piece also. So true and yet such fantasy. Good Luck
~Samantha
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Thanks so much Samantha! I truly appreciate your wonderful comment and your applause! I'm really happy you liked it! I've done a few writes from a child's perspective lately and it's been a different kind of challenge, to write from a child's heart. Thanks again for reading hun!
~Lori
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