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Worthless in Death




His life was messy, of course that's what
happens when you not just hit bottom, but
when you've crashed through it. He had
lost his divine grace, assuming he ever
had any, leaving a gash in his psyche, his
sense of being worth-while torn like just so much
confetti.

His fall, the epitome of those who masked
self-hatred with work. Loathing was his disease,
prone to of self-degregation thinly disguised as
modesty, he would drag out his pain during encore
after encore of demanded success.

Success soon took a backseat to the relief of failure
measured by cigarette after cigarette consuming him
in his quiet suicide. He never said, "good bye" or
"I'm sorry" as his relationships imploded under his
attacks of violence, alcohol and drugs, soon leaving
him completely alone.

His self-hatred and loathing soon consumed his
very soul, leaving a wretched carcature
of humanity that drove away all living creatures.

He continued his downward spiral, careening out
of control until he finally touched Death, causing
him to careen just one final time.

He laid in a disgusting back alley, an unwashed,
fetid lump that once was human. He had finally
achieved proof to a world that no longer cared,
what he had known all, that he was as worthless
in death as he believed himself to be in life,
all along.

 

 

 

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  • PalmettoSky
    January 29, 2007

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    I felt every emotion in this. Vivid, abstract and yet everything comes together. I truly feel the depth from this. So much truth. I loved every line of this piece as its' very touching and just full of positive thoughts and energy. Stunning imagery and the flow to this piece is quite impressive. Lovely write!! Great message in this poem. Thought provoking, Imaginative, and I loved your creative imagery. Your carefully chosen words painted a picture as I read your poetic work of art. I am glad I read it. thanks for sharing. Keep up the great work. Best of wishes to you. good luck in all that you do....peace always in all ways.

  • vanessa reen gold member
    January 28, 2007

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    I really enjoyed this piece. I found it totally thought provoking and have been reading it over and over again. It flows great and you have portrayed this person and thier situation very well.

    • Amythest Moonjade gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Merry meet vanessa reen,

      I see by your comments that my poem had an impact on you. That all any poet can wish for. Thank you for your comments and your compliments, they are always apreciated.

      Amythest
  • PalmettoSky
    January 28, 2007
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    I think you did an outstanding job on this poem. Another magnificent poem to your collection. This is a great poem. I love it all... the poem, the background, the topic....it's all great. there is a depth and undertone to this that goes and flows excellently. keep writing......you have a lot to offer. Best of wishes to you.

    . Rewarded 4


    • Amythest Moonjade gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Merry meet kandalplamer,

      Thank you for your insightful comments and thoughts. Thank you also for your compiments, they are always appreciated.

      Amythest

  • Talking Toni gold member
    January 6, 2007

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    Thought Provoking!!!!!!!!!!!!!!

    Boy this really makes you think doesn't it! This poor man although he did hurtful things to others, seems as though he lived his life in consant turmoil as well!!Your imagery here was so vivid that I went with you through the journey of this man's life and death !!!!A tragic poem but thought provoking all the same!!! Great write! Thanks for sharing this piece!!!!!!!!!!!!Toni

    • Amythest Moonjade gold member
      January 29, 2007
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      Merry meet Talking Tonie,

      Please forgive my tardiness in acknowledging the time you took to comment on my poem. I'm glad that you thought this was thought provoking, it was one of my goals when I wrote this. Thank you for taking the time to comment and I am sorry I am so tardy in thank you.

      Amythest

  • penman gold member
    January 6, 2007

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    Excellent

    What a great use of the word bank. Very artistic use of each word and wonderfully, skillful poem.

    Good luck in the contest.


    • Amythest Moonjade gold member
      January 6, 2007
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      Merry meet penman,

      Thank you for the high praise and for the applause. I don't think I shall achieve the mastery that you have, though I keep trying. Thank you again for your time to comment.


      Amythest

  • crystallynnbradford
    January 3, 2007

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    awe...

    it's sad and dark and depressing and those are almost my fav. poems! I like a lot of nature poems too. This was a really good poem and I am getting really inspired by this piece. I am a little hesitatent to comment on your work, because you do such an amazing job and I get a little nervous, because I don't wanna offend you in any way. But, I really liked this piece even though it doesn't really rhyme and no offense, because I really ejoyed reading this piece.


    • Amythest Moonjade gold member
      January 4, 2007
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      Merry meet Crystal,

      Thank you very much for your applause. I rarely am upset or annoyed by comments on my poetry. Part of becoming a good poet (I'm still working on that) is commenting on other people's poetry. It is through that medium that your own thoughts become more clarified. It is also through commenting that you come to understand the different forms of poetry out there.

      A good poet will take a look at the comments made and weigh them against their ability and what they were attempting to say and the form they chose to use. The poet either will thank you or decide that you were wrong in their mind.
      This does not mean that your comments were wrong. Poetry is a mallable and free flowing medium that is many different things to many differet people.

      The fact that you like rhyme and I don't, doesn't mean that your comments were of little value. That is how you stretch your understanding of forms. I do critique rhyme poetry because I don't write it (I don't do this well enough to enter anything, except maybe two of my poems) I do this to find what I liked and to read the comments of other people and to see what they saw in the poem.

      Never fear that you will make me angry or mad or be offended. Just say what you see or ask a question if you don't understand where something came from. Again, thank you for your applause and for commenting on my poem.

      Amythest
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