Remember when we met
Nervous and scared
We both were?
Remember when we played
In the pile of leaves
And you lost your watch.
Remember the paper fights
That lasted
Way past dawn?
Remember when we talked
And laughed
Till the restaurant
Was closed.
Remember the first look
As we stared into
Each other's eyes.
Remember the first kiss
That sent us flying
Higher then the stars.
Remember our wedding
How beautiful you looked
Coming out from the tee-pee.
Remember this, I will
Always love you
From yesterday to today to tomorrow.
Forever we
Shall remember.
Author notes
Option 1
A contest entry
- When Superheroes Fail by Night Phoenix.
875 points, ended February 25, 2007, 18 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
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I love this poem! I see it anonymously but I know who this is, undeniably!
Your style is original, as you know, and I love this one too! I think restaurant may be misspelt, but I'm not sure. Piles of leaves, and paper fights... sounds hilarious! 
love you 
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Hehe, I know who wrote this just by the style.
A wedding is a beautiful memory. Wonderful choice!!!
"Remember the paper fights
That lasted
Way past dawn?"
Paper fights? Interesting.
"Remember this I will
Always love you"
Here, though, I'd suggest:
"Remember this-
I will always love you"
or at least
"Remember this, I will
Always love you"
It took me a couple reads until I was getting that stanza right. Nice job!
Best of luck in my and Chelle's contest!
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Thanks Celli. Glad you thought this worhy of Honorable Mention. Glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for the points.
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Thanks Amber. Glad you thought this worhy of Honorable Mention. Glad you enjoyed this one. Thanks for the points.
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'restaurant'
Lovely memories and a stroll through love and its journey of life. Sighin here, makes me sooo jealous
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