The blurred light from the single candle,
the fressia fragrance from the foam bath,
a bubbles blanket covering our bodies
together with soft piano music
as our bare skin
shared the touch.
My hair, lazy snakes
kissing your chest
with poison-less fangs,
your hands on my breasts...
fingers biting my nipples
into hard ecstasy,
your lips massaging the aromatic oils
into my neck folds
then into my shoulders.
I pulled my leg out of the water
showing it off
smooth, long, feminine,
I let a drop of foam fall from my toe
on the candle flame
watching it sputter, complain,
small explosions dying on my wet skin
and pinching tender pain into it.
Then held my nose and sunk under
curling into a ball
and turning around
getting out of the water facing you
and hugging you
nipple to nipple
eyelash to eyelash
mouth to mouth.
You picked the glass of Merlot
and sipped
not swallowing
put the glass back down
and crushed your mouth again into mine
feeding me your wine
drinking it back
asking for my tongue to follow
sharing intimacy,
love.
I slid into you,
or you slid into me
or we slid into each other
the glass of wine overturning into the water
the candle falling to the bottom of the bath
and... still burning
illuminating our hidden nakedness
telling us we are the gods
of each other's body and spirit
since there is no more 'other'
there is just one... us.
It got chilly,
we woke up, still hugging
still sharing that moment of intimacy
and skin.
The candle was magically still burning
the glass of wine dry,
you pulled away against my voiced protest
and turned on the hot shower
washing off me the leftovers of soap,
of fragrance
of your lovemaking.
You dried me
combed my hair
pulled up my panties and the bra across my breasts
then tucked me into the bed
bringing along that candle which refused to die.
Are you not coming? I asked.
No, you answered, putting the candle on the night table
and sitting naked on the chair next to the bed.
I want to see you sleep.
Why? I asked, sleepy.
I don't want this candle to see more of you
than I do.
I fell asleep
knowing that when I wake up
the candle will still burn.
and you will still be there on that chair.
Author notes
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A contest entry
- Sensual, Spicy, and Sexy by Heavenly Angel.
475 points, ended January 17, 2007, 27 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Looking For Crickets II by B Chandler.
1200 points, ended July 23, 2007, 7 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Poems About Bubble Baths and /or Sensual Soaks by Mercury Rising.
600 points, ended August 15, 2007, 7 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Seduction by Ladybug.
550 points, ended September 10, 2007, 10 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - WONDERFUL-FUNDERFUL TIMES TOGETHER OR ALONE by liquidmindforever.
425 points, ended November 10, 2007, 15 entries
Honorable mention
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - Candlelight. by Poetryintheblood.
425 points, ended April 7, 2008, 11 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
Please tell me what you think
Comments
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No wonder it has all these trophies. This is beautiful, sensual and complete.
Buddy
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This is exquisitely penned and presented, thank you for your entry, good luck, Josie
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"I slid into you,
or you slid into me
or we slid into each other
the glass of wine overturning into the water
the candle falling to the bottom of the bath
and... still burning"
Now this is an amazingly vivid visualization of love at its finest, at its most intense, at its most tender. Incredibly sensual, my Friend. I hesitated to leave a comment...I thought perhaps I should tiptoe out silently, instead, so as to not wake the two lovers. Congratulations on your trophies. This one deserves many, Poet. 
Wanda
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"Are you not coming? I asked.
No, you answered, putting the candle on the night table
and sitting naked on the chair next to the bed.
I want to see you sleep.
Why? I asked, sleepy.
I don't want this candle to see more of you
than I do."
I loved this stanza....cleverly put...and very romantic...
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I was drawn deep into the magic of your poem. Seduced by such incredable poetry and grace, it really is such a pleasure to have read this outstanding poem and be left with so many wonderful images coming to life within the confines of my mind. I think this is one of your very best masterpieces I have had the pleasure to read.
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This is an absolutely beautiful piece - I can see why it has won so many times. Excellent imagery and passion - very tasteful
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Interesting
I believe the candle represents his passion for you.
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You are probably right about this candle.
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First of all thank you for entering this poem it was filled with deep passion as well as sensuality, the word method you used is great and the images are not too graphic yet just right, thanks for entering and best of luck
MxA
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I thought that this was a romantic piece. The sensuality was placed in this nicely. My favorite part had to be the ending. Your imagery was good, and it wasn't too explicit. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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so beautifully written <3
i love it!
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Congrats on the two golds, the sliver, and the two honorable mention trophies. This was an extremely intense and passionate entry. Whoever this was written for is so lucky and must be brilliant to have inspired such a piece. I liked the deep sensuality in this ... and the word choice was divine. Thank you for entering and good luck.
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This is such a delight to read. I enjoyed it very much. The romance simply drip off my computer screen. LOL.
I wish you all the best in this contest, Cathy -
I don't want this candle to see more of you
than I do.
My favorite line in this sensually explicit piece.
I fell asleep
knowing that when I wake up
the candle will still burn.
and you will still be there on that chair.
I'd feel better if this read: "I fell asleep
knowing that when I woke up
the candle would still be burning
and you would still be there on that chair"
Thank you for entering my contest: WONDERFUL FUNDERFUL
THINGS TOGETHER OR ALONE
lovelightpeace -
superb
this is the most erotic item I have ever encountered and due to the winnings of it already in both gold and silver I can only give it a honorable mention although it deserves 10 gold awards but I must be fair to all the entries of this contest.
this is the most luscious thing I have ever read and will print it to read out loud when i need to be inspired by my lover for new romance. I do believe you had the best entry of them all but due to fairness I wanted other people to have a share of the trophies sense you have already had those on this particular writing.
thanks for the enticing entry
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Thank you Tamara, I agree with you, others deserved a chance too
I am glad I took a part of this contest.
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it sounds good to me, i shall get the water running immediately - a good sensual, sexual journey down the page
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OMG this is just too peachy in it all.
I am lost for words but dang it girl you do know how to write good smutt.
Tamara
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Wonderful!
very,very good write!I love how the candle never burned out.Very romantic write.Best of luck in the contest!
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Exquisite
This is truly a beautiful and sensual poem that was exquisitely penned. 'My hair,lazy snakes/kissing your chest/ with poison-less fangs'. These are just a few of the remarkable lines and arresting images in this marvelous piece. Best of luck in my contest, and thanks for entering such a superb poem.
David
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Very magical and romantic imagery. Love the candles that went with this write. Nice use of vocabulary and applying to the human senses.
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WOW!!!
They would have been crazy if you DIDN'T win first place. I loved it, it's everything that erotic and sensuality SHOULD be. Your words just flowed poetically over the screen as a matter of fact the whole entire poem did the very same thing. It's just so beautiful and it just captives you with every line, word and stanza. Thank you so much for sharing your masterpiece with all of us. I also what to close this message with a Congratulations on winning the contest.
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Thank you Trixie08.
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You win
You got my vote with this one Sonja. Wow!
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Thank you Jim.
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Magical!
Sonja this is simply beautiful! WOW!!! So sensual, so well thought out, or does this happen to you often?
Whichever, I simply loved it! Sensual without being too sexual, not as easy as one would hope. From the title to the last verse it is perfection.
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Thank you Dawn for title "magical" and for your giggling. Curious, ha,ha??? Well, let it be my sweet secret
~Sonja~
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the sensuality and sensitivity you embed in this poem point to incredible tenderness so much in line with the subtle eroticism used as the vehicle to show it. the introductory lines set the tone, the rest follows in wake, and the line “My hair, lazy snakes / kissing your chest” is a stroke of genius.
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Thank you Joe for such a nice comment. Geniuos? Don't make me to. Yes, you have a right, the rest follows in wake...
~Sonja~
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Amazing
Such a beautifully written piece; amazing in its' beauty and descriptions! Sigh...
I love this! All the best to you! This is one for the books You should be proud!!!
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Thank you. I am glad that you like it.
~Sonja~
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