Slit my wrists and drown in blood
Suffocate on sadness
Look in the mirror and scream 'I'm not crazy!'
I wont give in to madness
Tears come to my eyes as I scream and scream
But like always no one hears
Or maybe they do, but I wont leave my room
I have to hide from my fears
With nothing to do I lay on the floor
And silently stare at the ceiling
Through all the pain I laugh out loud
What an awful feeling
A single tear runs down my cheek
But I don't bother to wipe it away
Whats the point? No one cares
I've heard the things that they say
Horrible rumors of my mental health
I try to block them out
But its so hard in this cold cruel world
Thats what its all about
And all the voices are screaming in my head
So I scream right back
I'm going crazy in the white walls of my room
So I paint them black
And alone in my room I see so many things
Telling me I need to die
I'm so afraid and they don't make it better
They laugh at my sorrowful cry
Hug my knees and rock back and forth
And hide in the corner of my room
Sit and cry for hours on end
and bask in sorrow and gloom
Stick a tooth brush down my throat
But it dosesn't stop the pain
Bang my head against the wall
Oh God I'm going insane!
A contest entry
- x Bring Me To The Depths of Insanity x by xxRainbowDawnxx.
300 points, ended June 14, 2007, 29 entries
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Honorable mention
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As stated below there IS lots of emotion, but it seems so generic I can't seem to be very intrigued by it. From the first line all I could think of was... "How cliche this is going to be..."
Not that I am against the whole "cutting" theme, I just dislike reading the same poem over and over.
Thanks for entering.
Depth: 6
Flow: 8
Literary Device: 7
Comprehension: 9
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Thanks for showing me this... I think it needs some work ... needs a little more imagery and depth. I am also not a fan of self infliction in poetry unless it is done really well. If you would LIKE to enter it you can... but I just suggest some changes here and there.
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That is so deeply emotional and honest! A sad way to feel but it happens. Thanks for the entry and best of luck!
Love~
Az
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There was alot of emotion in this poem. I would check for typo's I noticed a couple. Thanks for entering =)
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Wow.
Very deeply touched here. This is an amazing piece. A few spelling errors, but hey, it happens, right? Well Done!
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This is so full of emotion and confusion and pain. The only thing that I had any kind of problem with was that the background made reading this very hard unless I used the select all function on my browser. Unless you did this on purpose to further support the hiding of the feelings inside which would be brilliant by the way It was rather irksome. Other than that the wording and the flow kept me right there in it and captured the torture in the heart and mind wonderfully.
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wow
very nice poem, and i see your a big fan of insanity too! well very dark, very cool!
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very santanic like, I love it.
-Dante
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This poem just hits you straight away! Powerful poem.
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Wow, this is really somthing. It reminds me of drugs problems I used to have when I was a lot younger, and of when I'm feeling so low it's like I'm going to crack. This is a really brilliant conveyance of this, I love it, really do. I'm amazed at finding such a great poem on such an accurate account of what sounds like my own metal health! Really though, well done =]
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Who the hell is "Fall the Lies"? More like "Full of Lies" if you ask me. Speaking as a person who is demon-infested, I understand what it means to be driven into madness. No matter what I did, It only got worse. And it really went downhill when I told some-one about it (I'm STILL seeing a psychiatrist). Anyway, Wonderful poem. And "full of lies", Don't make me send a demon after you
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has no one commented on this? geeze . . . odd. this is very sad, and detailed but written very well. i know by know that you dont want to kill yourself, thankgod. i also know that you think james is your only reason for waking up. i hope that you'll change your mind. i try to help as much as possible and i'd do anything for you. as would chelsea and jessie. but anyway, nice poem my demented meggie lol.
Kitkat
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Good
And I completely disagree. As someone who has mental "issues", I can see EXACTLY where you are coming from... it sounds all too familiar. "Through all the pain I laugh out loud
What an awful feeling" Some people think that's weird or 'fake' but I know what it's like to feel so crazy you start to laugh, even though you're overwhelmed by feelings of pain and anguish. Take heart, dear friend, you are not alone. And even when it feels like your world is spinning hopelessly out of control, you can control how you react to things. And as a hint from an ex-cutter... causing yourself bodily harm or pain may ease the pain short-term, but in the long run, it only makes things worse. Take care, friend!
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Sokarjo
Thank you for the lovely comment. I really appreciate it. Sorry for my horrable spelling... but I try! Lol.
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*ok now normally if i didn't like a poem i wouldn't comment unless a critical review was invited but i am fed up with certain types of poems and things must be said* This poem is terrible, descriptions are general and cliche and the whole subject and the way it is presented is laughable, i dont think anyone could believe that you are turning insane and i find it quite an insult to those who do generally have problems, to sum up its just another emo(bad emo) bore.
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I think you should keep unconstructive comments like this to yourself. As someone who has been clinically diagnosed with 'stuff', I understand this poem very well; the whole subject is certainly NOT laughable, and by saying so you only show a sad ignorance of mental problems. I do have problems, or at least used to, and I think it's anything but an insult.
Of course, on a side note, there is some level of insanity that I embrace; there's a saying, "no one can be truly intelligent without being a little eccentric", and I agree. But there are people, I used to be one of them, who are so overwhelmed by pain and struggling that their world seems to crash in around them and they feel as if they are "losing it". You have just taken an attempt to express that pain and struggle and ground your heel into it. Now THAT, my friend, is an insult. -
ok now, just to elaborate on what megan said. your the idiot who read the poem. why in the hell would you read someones poetry, their emotions very possibly, and their hard work and tear it down it like that? what makes you think that just because your fed up with some people that you have any right to go off on my bestfriend? and by the way oh great smart one, it isnt an insult, its capturing their feelings. its almost paying respect to them showing she understands. ever think of it that way?
g'day jackass
kelcey -
fall the lies
I respect the fact that you have an opinion and want to openly voice that opinion.
Now that thats out of the way I want to tell you just what I think of that opinion. I dont give a fuck. You can suck a goat. Not to insult the goat. You seem to be the only one that doesnt like it, if you dont like these type of poems then why the hell are you reading mine?!?!? I'm glad I made you laugh. You make me laugh too, thinking that I'm really going to take this comment to heart.
Hugs and kisses to you
Megan
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