Six months... 184 days... April to October
No matter how you put it it seems so long
You'll be so far away
You tell me not to worry
and not to cry
because the time will swiftly pass by
But Great Lakes was closer
and at least you could call
This time the Atlantic will be between us
with no phone calls... only emails
somehow it's not the same
Not being able to hear your sweet voice
or look into your loving eyes
Not waking up in your protective embrace
or feeling the touch of your warm skin
My love... our love will grow stronger though
for like a fire it's forever getting bigger
You have my heart so please be careful
don't break it while your gone
This time the Atlantic is between us
with no phone calls... only emails
somehow it's not the same
Author notes
.... again for my asshole of an Ex..
A contest entry
- Give Me REAL by Logans-Mommy.
500 points, ended August 27, 2007, 33 entries
Silver trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
So how was it?
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this is a reli sad peom but even tho you may feel you are far apart in actual fact you are closer in the heart. i can totally relate to this poem because the one i love has gone into the army for 3 years so yh no email is the same great job hunny
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aww... sweetie...this is so sad...but remember, no matter how far you two are apart, love will keep you closer bthan ever.
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this was really sad.
I liked this a lot, you present a lot of emotion.
You misspelled 'because' in like six.
Good write! -
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You're soooooo right here!! No email could ever compare to a phone call, and IT'S NOT AT ALL THE SAME!!!
184 days seem like a lifetime and you did portray the horrible pain this distance will cause u in a wonderful way! Sigh. I can so easily relate to this piece. Double Sigh.
It almost made me cry, i could understand wat u feel so easily, and your words were just wonderful and well choosen.
that was an excellent but a very very very sad piece
Take care my friend,
Neera
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this is beautiful yet sad. the rhythm is smooth and the message easily understood. you are very talented. keep writing. God bless you
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This was a pretty good one here mystic. There are a pretty good bit of mispelled words though. The word feel should probaly be feeling and phone call should be phone calls at the next to the last line, but the wording and emotion behind it are good. I'm sure he will appreciate the poem.
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