Yellow Skies ,
filled with my now hollow cries
No more laughter
no more walking hand in hand
Hope of real love
absorbed in the bleakness of
a desolate land
The silent stars stand
in blackness ,shining
without any tangible luster
the night has hushed
as they congregate in
a lifeless cluster
Here I am ,crying dreams
needing you to stop these
cascading tears,to touch me
and again make me whole
cast to me a mere shard
of your brilliance
to revive this saddened soul
I strain to hear the joy
of your melodic strand
yet the bells have stopped ringing
I promise I'll never
let our love die
still the angels have
stopped singing
I beseech you to try
to love me again
look to the yellow skies
as they rain down my pleas
Know the blueness of this
heart as to the unyeilding
terra I fall on bended knees
Embrace me snowy weather
make me an entity of your
fleeting ,ashen cold
hold me a little closer
ice over this still longing heart
for too much warmth it still doth hold
Where did our love go
I beg to know when did
the blessing fall and pierce
your desires to be here
ice cold tears frozen on my
face with no place to melt
and as I tell myself to "let go,
he's not good enough for you ,"
I crave to have you near
I look to the silent stars
and entreat them to please
harken my hollow cries
as another year is ending
my only hope ,my only consolation
seems to lie in these yellow skies.
Marjorie Joyce L4eslie
01/02/07
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you are an awesome writer. I truly enjoyed reading, this is my favorite part. Where did our love go
I beg to know when did
the blessing fall and pierce
your desires to be here
ice cold tears frozen on my
face with no place to melt
and as I tell myself to "let go,
he's not good enough for you ,"
I crave to have you near
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well, Marjorie Joyce .....
oh my freakin God you're good!
lol you are a true master of imagery here friend.
and to have the depth that this write does.... i mean with it being a rhymee and all
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totaly rocks, as do you
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there is so much feeling in those words....overflowing to reach many painful hearts of loss..nice poem
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A beautifully rhymed poem. Oh my goodness, my heart ...
"The silent stars stand
in blackness ,shining
without any tangible luster
the night has hushed
as they congregate in
a lifeless cluster"
This stanza in particular is quite well done. It is difficult to lose a love - there are never any answers when one is taken from us, only that of loss.
Thank you for sharing the wonderful poem. I could relate to so many of your words. ~Pamela
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Yellow skies on Easter morn - uplifting and full of promise for the broken hearted. Your poem is very poignant.
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A heartfelt plee to a lover. very good. well done.
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it id a call for a lost love by a burning heart
perhaps the smoke has has asphyxiated the stars -
Great Rhymes
Good Rhyming poem, With rhythm and also excellent use of a broad vocabulary. I did not completely understand exactly what this one was about but that is often the best way to read poetry,as Coleridge observed, "poetry works best when imperfectly understood".I really enjoyed it, thanks.
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Great job. It's truley a beautiful piece, with practicaly no flaws. Though I noticed that you missplelled absorbed, in the 1st stanza. 'Absorbed'
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i love the imagey with the yellow skies. I mean the mere poetry that will come out of looking at sunrises and sunsets. you made life and love and heart and questions an in this piece..it was like almost venting away with beauty and grace...such easeness
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What an awesome write
Penned with such excellence and it also brought a tear to my eyes . You have touched the heart of many with this piece Im sure
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Beautiful poem aching with longing. I hope he came to his senses and returned. If not, it's his loss, the poor sap. Interesting choice of yellow as a sad color and not the obvious blue since yellow is usually associated with happy things - summer, sunshine, warmth, etc. But it worked very well.
I hope you're doing well. I noticed you haven't posted anything new for a year or so. You have a very expressive and involving way of writing. I hope you're writing. If not here, then somewhere else.
Take care,
Mark
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Such a heartfelt plea!!! Under the yellow sky...I hear your voice of supplication...and I feel your words in my soul. So many verses I truly adore in this write. Love has been the author of so many writes such as this. The wonder and the pain of love...such a mystery it is! I enjoyed this very much...I do hope your cries are heard dear poet!!!
Az
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There's a couple of typos and I think you should clean up the punctuation a bit. But I love the title and the lonesome feeling it evokes. The poem is just a tad overly melodramatic for me but there are some lovely images and lines within it as well. I especially liked "Embrace me snowy weather make me an entity of your fleeting ,ashen cold". Lots of potential within.
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wow...
"I beseech you to try
to love me again
look to the yellow skies
as they rain down my pleas
Know the blueness of this
heart as to the unyeilding
terra I fall on bended knees"
my favorite part. that was absolutely beautiful. brilliant flow, and use of words. i felt what you were feeling, saw what you were seeing. the title fits perfectly, and each part fits together very nicely. great work. this was totally amazing, positively wonderful!
Air
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i hear the lonesome whip-poor-will
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yet thats what everyone is looking for in POETRY!
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wow, this is a sad and depressing poem!
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Stunning
A rich and beautifully textured poem; one that leaves the reader caught up in the emotion of your words. I felt such empathy with the intense level of drama underlying it...I've lived these same feelings, but could never have expressed them as beautifully as you have, here. There were so many awesome lines in this...in the 2nd stanza "shining without any tangible luster;" in the third stanza "crying dreams," and in the final stanza, I loved the reference to the "silent stars." Your backgound, too, sets the tone for the piece, letting us know there is something ahead that is beautiful, yet sad...melancholy. As always, my friend, your work is beautiul, and touches my soul. Beautiful work!
Paula
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There is sadness here but it has an encouraging tone, oddly enough. I know that trials come so that we can be stronger still. Sometimes it's extremely hard to see through clear eyes but "yellow" is my favorite color, and this poem replenishes me. Beautiful!
Much Love ♥
Renee
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Great Poem!
It has been long since i last commented on yur work. Dear friend, this is but a beautiful piece. I am taken my the imagery. Keep this up. U are a wonderful poet. I enjoy reading yur poetry. The sky for poets is but the limit. Have a good day
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Beautifully rich
Sadness touching so deeply. A truly wonderful write.
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Sweet Sadness!
As I read your poem, I felt a sadness inside that I normally get when I listen to one particular Mary J. Blige song "Special Part Of Me". That song always gives me a melancholy feeling and I felt the same feeling when I read your poem. It touched me in a special way. You have a knack as a poet to reach out to people and grab a hold of their emotions. Very well done poet and my apologies for my delayed response. Avril
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This is really nice, but you were to choose only one from the list. It is hard to make it sound smoothe when you try to use the whole list of lines. Parts are very good, where others are kind of stiff. Thank you for entering.
Sam
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This is somberly BEAUTIFUL!
There are deep-set emotions in every stanza here my sister. Love will come again. There is such sadness, such a need to understand why in these words. This is sad but very beautiful. Love is like the wind it blows away sometimes but that wind surely returns. I wish you the best in love and this challenge.
Always Lovingly ♥
Reneé
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i forgot the applause
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melodic comes to mind first, the lyrical quality of this, on the second reading, the assonance takes hold as i read this aloud, as i pause after the third reading i am impressed by the hollow feeling impressed upon my heart as i fight tears to write this....truly a wonderful poem and worth bookmarking.
blessings and best wishes, ~r.
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I like it. the wording, I kinda made me feel good. _ nora
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thank you so much for the read.i will be catching up on my faves soon.i know i can expect something great from you.
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