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Secret place for Elves

Something we know how to do

Is build a place to hide from you

High up in the trees we climb

For scattles of years; in elfin time

 

So the king of elves came to me

Said build a house up in a tree

All he had to do was ask

Then the elves set to the task

 

A house in a tree, that’s what he said

To hide from humans that we dread

So we huddled we to whisper

To keep our plans much crisper

 

We need a name; what to call it?

A Tree House! That name will fit

So now our work has just begun

Hammering, singing elfin fun

 

A secret place high in the tree

A place where no one else can see

A place to hide for another scattle

To avoid a nasty battle

 

A cozy place, a place to love

High up in the tree above

Secret creatures, Elves are we

Now living high up in the tree

 

 

Amera

Author notes

This poem is written in amera style. If you’re not acquainted with it, it’s two poems in one. One poem is nested within the other differentiated by the bold print. The inside poem (bold print) should be read one line at a time. This style can depict two opposing points of view or draw attention to the main point of the poem.

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  • Treasure 5 gold member
    March 24

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    Wow this is wonderfully written, I love your imaginary, It is really beautiful and I loved it! I loved it! It was a pleasure to read.


  • Childsight
    May 12, 2008
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    sweet! I love the two poems in one idea! thank you for sharing your poem!


  • Li snuffles
    November 14, 2007

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    wow!! I love the fact that you made up your own style!! how uniwue and how strange is it that i chose this poem the first for me to read!!!

    you seem like a really talented writer

    and i look forward to reading more of your work..xo!!


  • Arizona Sunset
    September 10, 2007

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    a poem within a poem, very clever, a unique style , thank you for a delightful read


  • capricornpoet
    July 20, 2007

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    sweet

    And elfin world, whispers to keep it crisper...lovely tale telling,,full of magic and the time of scattles ..
    i liked that .. lovely and whimsical.

  • hotgurl
    March 21, 2007

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    Great!!!

    Im gelir ceni ad lín!(Curtesy) My Lady!!! What a great poem!!! It reminds me of fair Lothlorien! My heart may belong to Mirkwood, but the fair golden trees of Lorien is the most beautiful to ever see. There are no trees in Mirkwood or Fangorn that will ever compare to Lorien. Namárië!


  • Vagabond
    January 30, 2007

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    An interesting concept, two poems in one. The hidden one seemed a little bit sketchy, but the primary one was nicely written, good work, and great story here.


  • Manoura xx
    January 24, 2007

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    ohyyya...this is on your site isn't it...i commented on it on your site as well...smart...okay...BYE!!!!!!!


  • Tam
    January 22, 2007

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    Whoa....HOW COOL IS THIS!

    I love this form...a poem within a poem...YOU ARE A GENIUS! OMG!
    May I use this form if I give you credit as the inventor?
    How cool are you?
    LOVE IT!
    And I wish to climb up in the tree house and HIDE!
    RIGHT NOW...I WISH TO HIDE INDEED! LOL!
    Fantastic write...very creative and unique!
    Blessings! Tammy


    • Amera gold member
      January 23, 2007
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      Silly... yes you can use it. I know at least a dozen poets that are using it. You can take mediocre poem and build around it to beef it up, I have better examples some have two opposing points of view and others show simply different prospective. They are listed on my page under Amera style. Love Amera


  • Heart Sutra
    January 14, 2007

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    That is a neat trick you have going on in this poem with the whole "two for one" thing. Nifty. Thank you for entering the contest.


  • freespirit51
    January 2, 2007

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    I love this piece. It was a unique style to which I have seen many. The rhyme and flow was great as well and I found it to be quite interesting as well. You have a terrific talent. Hope to read more from you.


  • Kappa Pyua
    January 2, 2007
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    excellent

    I like this style very much. It is intreging. I've never seen it used before. Thank you for the inspiration. I'm going to work on this but it'll be hard I think for someone like me. well I love fantasy as well and you hit the mark Hope to read some more.UNT


  • green mother rose
    January 2, 2007
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    I really like this poem..

    I haven't seen anything like this. Later..
    Green Mother Rose


  • Bullet To The Head
    January 2, 2007

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    from one elf to another...

    this is a intresting piece

    i like tree houses...so thats where they came from huh?
    i like this stlye of poetry as well, nice work

    thanks for sharing your talent and elfishness


  • Elfin
    January 2, 2007

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    hello Amera

    From one elf to another, I have to say "Wasn't it hard work building that tree house?" LOL.
    This is kind of a strange piece of work, strange in a clever way, but then again us little people are very strange and very clever. I found the last two lines in the 5th stanza rather jerky and on the 3rd line, 1st stanza you have used the word "in" twice.
    Stanza 2, 2nd line should have quotation marks before build and after tree.
    Well done and good luck in the contest. Val.


  • masterblaster gold member
    January 2, 2007
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    Hi, what an enchanting poem, well I love to read about elves and fairies, we need poem of enchantment, to many poems of doom and gloom around this was refresing, all the best in the comp and a happy new year to you and all the elves, Di


  • ShaShay
    January 2, 2007
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    Amusing

    I love this...hard job to take disconnected words and make a rhyming poem. You really did a great job. Pen on...

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