You look at me,
I close my eyes so you won't see,
All the pain that I try to hide,
All the wounds you caused that still bleed inside,
As you talk about her I just smile,
Yet all the while,
I just want to scream and shout,
Tear my breaking heart out,
But it rests in your hands, your heart,
It belongs to you to bash and rip apart,
How could I have fallen so foolishly,
Why did I think you would pick me,
Could it have been the whispers in my ear,
Could it have been that you understood my fear,
You broke through my wall,
And hard and fast for you I did fall,
Maybe I should've stopped to think,
But it seems I was hooked in a blink,
There was no turning back,
On you I was stuck fast,
You made me think I could have you,
But I knew it was too good to be true,
Something as good as we had could never last,
I should've slowed down but I was going way too fast,
we are both foolish and young,
Now it's over before it had really begun,
It's fine that you don't want me,
As long as she makes you happy,
I still wish we could be together,
But I'm not gonna wait forever,
It seems I have to let you go,
Even though everything inside of me is screaming no,
But I'll hold you close in my aching heart,
Even though we never got our start,
I'll hold on to the shattered memory,
Of what we were supposed to be.
A contest entry
- No Perfection by xTomorrowx.
500 points, ended June 6, 2008, 33 entries
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I like it, love poems are usually my favourites, and anger poems, and sad poems and pretty much any that show emotion =P
This is good though, I really like it, it worked well...
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Good write! My only major critique is the rhyme. Some of it is forced and somewhat cheap. Like "young" and "begun" it doesn't exactly rhyme, but other than that it was good. Keep penning!
Safely hidden in the darkness,
~The Rocker who lost all aka Sacred Shadows
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Time does heal the pain. it may take a year or maybe 10. but one thing's for sure, pain will make you stronger. take this as just one of life's many experiences. and what you've done here is not bad. it's always good to let those feelings out on paper. it's how i got started in here too.
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I really like the wording that you used and this poem is so full of emotion. I love how the emotions don't make sense and they make perfect sense at the same time. I think a lot of people will be able to relate to this. Good job.
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Well Little lady I met a girl when I was 13 and we both fell in love,madly.We were in bliss for three years and she fell pregnant,things went on behind my back and I finished with her.She had our daughter Gillian who's turning 18 this month but it never healed the split for me and one lie led to another,so she ended up moving away with Gill to another town.I tried to settle down a few times with different girls and had another four kids to different wemen,still I couldn't find any happiness.So stuff happened and I got mixed up dealing drugs,I was 27 and got caught and was sentenced to four years and I took it on the chin.One day a letter arrived for me and it was Roslynn the girl I left behind 14 years earlier,we started writing to each other and little by little I realised that I'd been searching hopelessly,endlessly for true love but couldn't find it anywhere.Roslynn visited me every week and I decided to forgive her and make a go of things.We've now been together for over three years and I'm truely happy.My first love was the love I'd searched for for years and I realised this.So what I'm saying is if you're the right girl for this guy he will see it for sure,true love lasts forever.Good luck.Shug
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Tears are never easy to let go, And the heart is always the first to absorb hurt, This is one of the best and very emotional pieces I've had the chance to read on AP.. tHANK YOU FOR ALLOWING ME TO READ AND COMMENT ON,, aGAIN THANK YOU...
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