eighteenth century
my mother taken away
never to return
it taught me great endurance
I wish I had a mother
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Tanka is a classic form of Japanese poetry related to the haiku with five unrhymed lines of five, seven, five, seven, and seven syllables. (5, 7, 5, 7, 7)
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I love this tanka.
It seems to me like no matter what you write, it comes out shining.
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Wow,
Very sad, yet so well penned sweet teach!
Thanks for sharing you, much love, Timothy
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wow! this is old. I forgot I wrote this.
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hey...i donno if one of my other comments lyk appeared...but if it didn't this is what i said:
LOVED IT LOVED IT LOVED IT!!!!!!! -
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Wow, there is something I really like about this but I can't quite put my finger on it. Sadly beautiful? Thanks for entering.
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not bad
i never wrote any tanka myself but I am big fan of it. One thing you need to remember with haiku and tanka is the syllable system is not rigid as it is taught. A very good poem with a lasting image.
~Kimberly~
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