She stood there in the darkness
By the baby grand,
Waiting just to meet him,
The pianist with the band.
A love of hers from long ago,
Things just didn’t work out,
They went their separate ways,
Too much heartache, too much doubt.
Rehearsals, they were needed,
So long since she had sung,
No notes of music passed her lips,
To solitude she clung.
They asked if she would join them,
For just one final show,
Although her heart was breaking,
She felt she had to go.
There she waited patiently,
Her heart was beating fast,
She longed to turn, and run away,
Not stay, and face her past.
There before her very eyes,
The man whom she loved so,
He smiled and took his seat,
Whispered soft and sweet, “Hello”.
She felt her body tremble
At the mere sound of his voice,
Smiling she said bravely,
“Hello”, she had no choice.
His slender hands began to play,
A tune they both adore,
‘A Sentimental Journey’
Made both their spirits soar.
He stood and took her in his arms,
Their lips touched in a kiss,
For just a moment, time stood still,
Together, in heavenly bliss.
Author notes
Option 6
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A contest entry
- Picture Inspired. by A Murderous Lament.
380 points, ended March 15, 2007, 11 entries
Gold trophy winner
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest - It could be an obession with still life fantasies, or it could be a picture contest. Who knows? by Vernal.
1000 points, ended June 23, 2007, 11 entries
• next poem in this contest, remove from contest
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Wow
Wow... this is a prewrite?? It fits so well with the picture. It's really beautiful and I love it even more since I play the piano and know the feeling. Great write.
A MURDEROUS LAMENT <\33
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I like this poem so much, it tells a story and I am wondering if it is a true story or a fictional one? The rhyme scheme works really well and keeps the reader reading it. I love it.
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good job
I thought this had a beautiful story to it and was well written. My only suggestion is in the flow. There were some parts where the removing or adding of a single word could greatly improve the flow of your poem. For example,
Rehearsals they were needed,
So long since she’d sung,
that last line could read "so long since she had sung."
It flows much better. But this is just a suggestion, I truly did enjoy the poem. It had a soft sweetness behind it. Good job!
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Awesome
Sue this poem is so beautiful the romance flows with a real sentimental feeling within your wonderful words.
Awesome write sweetheart Love Brian.
xxx
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lovely story put so well in verse, the kind of happy ending that we all dream of. well done happy new year to you as well
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