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The Lamoure Hotel

How many nights had she walked the street
Hard cruel concrete would torture her feet
The dark dingy street by the Lamoure Hotel
The stagnant breeze with cheap perfume smell

All to oft had her thoughts been obscured
by the wrenching hunger she had endured
Unfaithful husbands, sailors and worse
One last dollar left in her purse

To fend for a child she worked by night
In service of men she would rather fight
In the Lamoure Hotel, her clothes in a pile
Men lay on her belly for more than a while

So next time you think that she is a bother
Just because you don’t know your father
For the love of you she endured hell
Flat on her back in the Lamoure Hotel

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Amera

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  • Swan song gold member
    May 13, 2007

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    Well put together, Sad but true. Only thing is most
    woman of this trade are meth users and they have one foot in the grave. It is horrid and ugly.


  • Shadow Lynx
    January 12, 2007

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    Great rhyming structure,easy flowing with a good choice of words and images,although a sad story you can be happy this is a very good read


  • Im3
    January 8, 2007

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    Nice rhymes with seemless transition. You have a ift to express in more than just words. I like the story line here, as well as the verse. Well Done!!!

  • Im3
    January 2, 2007

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    Awesome

    I loved the story, and it was written ery well with seemless transition. Nice rhymes written with ease and relaxing flow. I liked it alot!


  • slipperssun gold member
    January 1, 2007
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    For the love of you she endured hell
    Flat on her back in the Lamoure Hotel
    this write is fantastic. i liked this bit because alot of the time we dont realise that our parents do things for us that they would not normally do. thank you for entering my contest. goood luck

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